Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は基本的な内容を含んでいますが、文法の誤り（"my both work"は"both my work and study"などに修正）や語彙の選択（"many information are digitalized"は"much information is digitalized"が自然）に注意が必要です。また、回答がやや冗長で、より具体的な状況や理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I use my computer every day for both work and studying. For example, I write reports and research online. It is essential because most information is now digitalized, making computers indispensable in daily life.

提案: 回答は不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや言葉の詰まりが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。文を簡潔にし、時制や語順を正しく使い、具体的な情報を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: I first used a computer when I was 10 years old. At that time, my parents gave me a Windows 98 computer as a birthday gift, and I was very happy to receive it.

提案: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤り（"a computers"は"a computer"）、言葉の詰まりが多いです。より流暢で自然な表現を心がけ、具体的な理由や影響を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I can't imagine life without a computer because I use it daily for work and studying. For instance, as a student in the UK, almost all lectures require using computers for notes and assignments.

提案: 回答は質問の意図に十分に答えていません。"conditions"（状況）について具体的に述べる必要があります。また、文法的な誤り（"the computers"は"computers"）や語彙の使い方に注意し、より明確で具体的な説明を加えることが望ましいです。

例: It would be difficult to use a computer in places with poor internet connection or during power outages. For example, watching live sports or concerts online can be challenging without a stable connection.

× I use it for my both work and studying.

✓ I use it for both my work and studying.

The phrase 'my both work and studying' is incorrect because 'both' should precede the two items it refers to, and possessive pronoun 'my' should come after 'both'. The correct order is 'both my work and studying'.

× many information are digitalized.

✓ much information is digitalized.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular. Therefore, 'many' is incorrect; 'much' should be used, and the verb should be singular 'is' instead of 'are'.

× I, you were just, umm, computer, uh, first timer when I was a 10 years old at that time, uh, my parents abroad, uh, Windows 98 to, umm, me as a gift of my birthday.

✓ I was just a computer first-timer when I was 10 years old. At that time, my parents abroad gave me Windows 98 as a birthday gift.

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect pronoun usage ('you' instead of 'I'), awkward phrasing ('computer, uh, first timer'), incorrect article usage ('a 10 years old' should be '10 years old'), and sentence structure problems. The corrected sentence uses proper past tense verbs and clearer structure.

× I can't imagine a life without a computers, umm, because I have to use it, uh, both, uh, in my workplace and uh, universities.

✓ I can't imagine a life without a computer, umm, because I have to use it both in my workplace and at university.

'Computers' is plural but the article 'a' indicates singular; this is inconsistent. Also, 'universities' should be singular or rephrased as 'at university' to match the context. The corrected sentence fixes these number agreements and preposition usage.

× I study umm, in the UK right now and uh, uh, almost all students uh, use umm, computers in their lectures.

✓ I study in the UK right now, and almost all students use computers during their lectures.

The preposition 'in' is acceptable for 'study in the UK', but 'in their lectures' is less natural than 'during their lectures' to indicate usage within the time of lectures.

× I think it's difficult for many people to use the computers, especially they watch sports game and other live events such as music and concerts.

✓ I think it's difficult for many people to use computers, especially when they watch sports games and other live events such as music concerts.

The definite article 'the' before 'computers' is unnecessary here because it refers to computers in general. Also, 'sports game' should be plural 'sports games', and 'music and concerts' is awkward; 'music concerts' is more natural. Additionally, 'especially they watch' should be 'especially when they watch' for correct conjunction usage.