Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“for my city”应为“for my study”，时态使用不一致。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: I usually use a computer for my studies and work. During my postgraduate years, I used it to write and polish my thesis. Now, as a teacher, I prepare my lessons using a computer.

提案: 回答较为自然，但存在语法错误，如“just know”应为“just knew”，且句子结构略显松散。建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I first used a computer during my primary school years when my father bought one for work. As a child, I mainly played computer games and watched videos on it. Interestingly, the computer still works today.

提案: 回答中表达不够准确，“turn to Gray”应为“become dull”或类似表达。句子重复且缺少连贯性。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: I think my life would become dull without a computer. I have relied on it since I was a child for entertainment, studying, and work. Without it, managing daily tasks would be very difficult.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，如“use them”应为“use it”，“use properly”应为“use it properly”。建议完整表达观点，注意语法和句子完整性。

例: It is difficult for me to use a computer when I don't know how to operate certain software properly. For example, I struggle with learning WPS Office skills, which are important for my work.

× Back in my postgraduate school years, I'm using my computer to write and Polish my graduation thesis.

✓ Back in my postgraduate school years, I used my computer to write and polish my graduation thesis.

这里描述的是过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。'I'm using'是现在进行时，不符合时间背景。应改为过去时态 'I used'。

× And now I'm working as a teacher, so I needed to prepare my lessons.

✓ And now I'm working as a teacher, so I need to prepare my lessons.

句子前半部分是现在时态，后半部分用过去时态 'needed' 不合适，应保持时态一致，改为现在时态 'need'。

× Well, I remember it was during my primary school years when my father bought a computer for his work, and as a little kid I just know how to play computer games and watch videos.

✓ Well, I remember it was during my primary school years when my father bought a computer for his work, and as a little kid I just knew how to play computer games and watch videos.

描述过去的经历，'I just know' 应该用过去时 'I just knew'。

× Well, I think my life would turn to Gray if without a computer.

✓ Well, I think my life would turn gray without a computer.

短语 'turn to Gray' 不正确，正确表达是 'turn gray'，且 'if without a computer' 缺少主语，应直接用 'without a computer'。

× Like I completely, I completely rely on it for entertainment, studies and work.

✓ I completely rely on it for entertainment, studies, and work.

句子开头的 'Like' 用法不当，且重复 'I completely'，应去掉 'Like' 和重复部分，使句子简洁通顺。

× Without it, I wouldn't be able to live.

✓ Without it, I wouldn't be able to live.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Well, actually it is difficult for me to use them when I do not know how to use properly.

✓ Well, actually it is difficult for me to use it when I do not know how to use it properly.

前文指代单数 'a computer'，此处用复数 'them' 不合适，应改为单数 'it'。

× For example, I have problems learning how to use the WPS skills which helps with my work.

✓ For example, I have problems learning how to use WPS skills which help with my work.

'the WPS skills' 中 'the' 不必要，且 'skills' 是复数，谓语动词应用复数 'help'。

× So that's the time that I.

✓ So that's the time when I have problems.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，需补充完整使句子通顺。