Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误，如“writing ports”应为“writing reports”，“Over computers”应为“Overall, computers”。建议注意单词拼写和语法准确性，同时避免冗余，回答应更简洁自然。

例: I usually use a computer for work tasks like writing reports and creating presentations because it has efficient software tools. Additionally, I use it for entertainment, such as watching movies or playing games when I want to relax. Overall, computers are essential for communication, helping me stay connected with friends and colleagues via email.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误，如“bookie screen”应为“bulky screen”，“silk devices”应为“slick devices”。建议注意词汇准确性，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。

例: I first used a computer many years ago when I was in primary school. It was a desktop with a bulky screen, quite different from the sleek devices we have today. It only had basic functions like typing documents, similar to the simple features of older mobile phones. This experience sparked my interest in technology from an early age.

提案: 回答表达基本清晰，但存在语法错误，如“significant less efficient”应为“significantly less efficient”，“starting and accepting information”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和语法，使表达更自然。

例: Without computers, my life would be significantly less efficient and more challenging. They play a crucial role in my daily activities, such as communication and quickly accessing information. Without this technology, I would have to rely on traditional methods like handwriting notes or face-to-face interactions, which would slow down my productivity and limit my ability to stay connected with others.

提案: 回答中有拼写和语法错误，如“pro condition”应为“poor conditions”，“lighting is working”应为“lighting isn’t working”，“can handle my ability”表达不当。建议注意词汇准确性和句子结构，避免表达模糊。

例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer in poor conditions, such as when there is no electricity or the lighting isn’t working. For example, if I’m outside at night without proper lighting, it’s hard to see the screen clearly. Additionally, a slow or unstable Internet connection can affect my ability to complete tasks efficiently, especially those that require online access.

× I usually use a computer when I need to complete work related tasks such as writing ports or creating presentation because it offers efficiently in this antivirus software tools.

✓ I usually use a computer when I need to complete work-related tasks such as writing reports or creating presentations because it offers efficiency with antivirus software tools.

句中“writing ports”应为“writing reports”，“creating presentation”应为“creating presentations”，因为“reports”和“presentations”是可数名词，需用复数形式。

× Additionally, I rely on computer for entertainment purpose like watching movies or playing games, especially when I want to relax at home.

✓ Additionally, I rely on the computer for entertainment purposes like watching movies or playing games, especially when I want to relax at home.

“rely on computer”缺少冠词，应为“rely on the computer”；“entertainment purpose”应为复数“entertainment purposes”，因为指多种娱乐用途。

× Over computers are indispensable for communication allowing me to stay connected with friends and college through emails.

✓ Overall, computers are indispensable for communication, allowing me to stay connected with friends and colleagues through emails.

“Over computers”应为“Overall, computers”，“college”应为“colleagues”，前者是拼写错误，后者是复数形式。

× It was a desktop with a bookie screen, quite different from the silk devices we have today.

✓ It was a desktop with a bulky screen, quite different from the sleek devices we have today.

“bookie”应为“bulky”，“silk”应为“sleek”，前者形容屏幕笨重，后者形容设备时尚流畅。

× I remember only had basic functions like typing documents, similar to the simple feature of older mobile phones.

✓ I remember it only had basic functions like typing documents, similar to the simple features of older mobile phones.

句子缺少主语“it”，且“feature”应为复数“features”，因为指多个功能。

× Without the computer, my life would be significant less efficient and more challenging.

✓ Without the computer, my life would be significantly less efficient and more challenging.

“significant”应为副词形式“significantly”，修饰形容词“less efficient”。

× Computers play a crucial role in my daily activities such as communication, starting and accepting information quickly.

✓ Computers play a crucial role in my daily activities such as communication, storing and accessing information quickly.

“starting and accepting”用词错误，应为“storing and accessing”，更符合语境。

× Without this technology, I would have to rely on more traditional methods like handwriting notes or face to face interactions, which would slow down my productivity and limits my ability to stay connected with others.

✓ Without this technology, I would have to rely on more traditional methods like handwriting notes or face-to-face interactions, which would slow down my productivity and limit my ability to stay connected with others.

“face to face”应连字符连接为“face-to-face”；“limits”应为“limit”，与主语“which”保持一致。

× It would be difficult for me to use computer in pro condition, such as when there is no electricity or lighting is working.

✓ It would be difficult for me to use a computer in poor conditions, such as when there is no electricity or the lighting is not working.

“use computer”缺少冠词，应为“use a computer”；“pro condition”应为“poor conditions”；“lighting is working”应为“the lighting is not working”。

× Additionally, a slow or stable Internet connection can handle my ability to complete tasks efficiently, especially role sets requirements.

✓ Additionally, a slow or unstable Internet connection can hinder my ability to complete tasks efficiently, especially role set requirements.

“stable”应为“unstable”表示不稳定；“can handle my ability”用词错误，应为“can hinder my ability”；“role sets requirements”应为“role set requirements”。