Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构较为混乱，且有重复和不必要的词汇。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并避免冗余。

例: I use a computer every day because I am a computer science student. It helps me with my studies, work, and completing challenging projects.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议练习正确的时态和句子结构，简洁明了地回答问题。

例: The first time I used a computer was in junior school during a computer class. Our teacher taught us how to open Word files and use basic functions.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，内容重复且不够具体。建议使用更准确的语法，避免重复，并具体说明没有电脑的影响。

例: Life without a computer would be very difficult for me because I study computer science. I rely on it to learn and solve complex problems.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，使用正确的语法，并具体说明困难的情况。

例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer if it is very old because I am used to the latest technology and old computers may not support the software I need.

× Well, actually my major is computer science, so I always use computer every day for working, for studying and I must use it to solve my difficult projects or raise some papers.

✓ Well, actually my major is computer science, so I always use a computer every day for working, for studying and I must use it to solve my difficult projects or write some papers.

这里的“use computer”缺少冠词“a”，因为“computer”是可数名词，单数时需要冠词。还有“raise some papers”用词不当，应改为“write some papers”。

× Well the first time use use a computer was when I in the Junior School we have a computer lesson and our teacher teach us to how to use the computer to open a word file or do some magical things in some.

✓ Well, the first time I used a computer was when I was in Junior School. We had a computer lesson and our teacher taught us how to use the computer to open a Word file or do some magical things.

这里时态错误较多，描述过去的事情应使用过去时态，如“used”，“was”，“had”，“taught”。另外，句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子。

× Well, I think it would be very terrible for me if I don't have a computer or the world don't have a computer, because my interest is searching the computer science and I need to use computer to learn works on work for some for some difficult issues.

✓ Well, I think it would be very terrible for me if I didn't have a computer or if the world didn't have a computer, because my interest is in studying computer science and I need to use a computer to work on some difficult issues.

“don't have”应改为过去式“didn't have”以符合虚拟语气；“searching the computer science”表达不当，应为“studying computer science”；“use computer”缺少冠词“a”；“learn works on work”表达混乱，应改为“work on some difficult issues”。

× Well, if the computer is too old, I would struggle to use it well because I have a great skill to use the latest computer, but I don't ask the old version of the computer, I would.

✓ Well, if the computer is too old, I would struggle to use it well because I have great skills in using the latest computers, but I don't like the old versions of computers.

“a great skill”应为复数“great skills”；“use the latest computer”应为复数“latest computers”；“I don't ask the old version”表达错误，应为“I don't like the old versions”；“computer”应根据上下文使用复数形式。