Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I use a computer daily at work to complete my tasks, and at home, I type educational materials for my daughter's learning."

例: I use a computer daily at work to complete my tasks efficiently, and at home, I also use it to prepare educational materials for my daughter's studies.

提案: Improve clarity and coherence by structuring your answer with linking words and clearer details. For example, "I first used a computer when I was very young. At home, we had one computer, and I used to play Batman games and sometimes tried to access my father's work email."

例: I first used a computer when I was very young. At home, we had one computer, and I enjoyed playing Batman games. Sometimes, I even tried to explore my father's work email out of curiosity.

提案: Make your answer more natural and specific by using linking words and clearer vocabulary. For example, "Life without computers would be challenging because they make tasks easier. For instance, computers allow us to connect globally and automate work instead of doing it manually."

例: Life without computers would be difficult because they simplify many tasks. For example, they enable us to communicate with people worldwide and automate work processes that were traditionally done by hand.

提案: Try to provide a more detailed and natural answer. You can mention possible situations or challenges. For example, "I find it difficult to use a computer when there is no internet connection or when the device is slow or malfunctioning."

例: I find it difficult to use a computer when the internet connection is poor or when the computer is slow or has technical problems.

× I use computer daily at work to accomplish all the required tasks from me.

✓ I use computers daily at work to accomplish all the required tasks assigned to me.

The noun 'computer' should be plural 'computers' because it refers to the general use of computers, not a single one. Also, 'tasks from me' is incorrect; it should be 'tasks assigned to me' to express that tasks are given to the speaker.

× I also use computer at home to type some educational materials for my daughter learning.

✓ I also use a computer at home to type some educational materials for my daughter's learning.

The noun 'computer' needs the article 'a' because it is singular and countable. Also, 'my daughter learning' is incorrect; it should be 'my daughter's learning' to show possession.

× We had one computer at home and I remember I played Batman and I was testing my father through his work e-mail.

✓ We had one computer at home and I remember I played Batman and I was testing my father through his work email.

The word 'e-mail' is commonly written as 'email' now, but this is a minor style issue. No plural or singular error here. No correction needed for singular/plural in this sentence.

× Computers made our life much easier.

✓ Computers make our lives much easier.

The verb should be in present tense 'make' to match the general truth. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives' because it refers to multiple people's lives.

× By using computer we can connect with other people from all around the world.

✓ By using computers we can connect with other people from all around the world.

The noun 'computer' should be plural 'computers' because it refers to the general use of computers.

× We can also develop automated work rather than manual written traditional way of.

✓ We can also develop automated work rather than the traditional manual written way.

The phrase 'manual written traditional way of' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'the traditional manual written way' to correctly order adjectives and include the definite article.

× There are no special conditions where I feel I can't use a computer at that time.

✓ There are no special conditions where I feel I can't use a computer at any time.

The phrase 'at that time' is incorrect because it implies a specific time, but the meaning is general. 'At any time' is more appropriate.