Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repeating the same idea and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: I use a computer mainly for school projects because my teachers often assign us tasks that require research and typing. For example, I use it to write essays and create presentations, which helps me complete my assignments efficiently.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Use past tense correctly and avoid run-on sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I first used a computer when I was in secondary school because my mother bought one for me to study. It helped me a lot with assignments and preparing presentations, which made learning easier.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected by linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Use correct grammar and avoid awkward phrases to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Without a computer, my life would be boring and more difficult because I rely on it for studying. For example, I use a computer to create presentation slides and complete assignments, which makes my work easier and more efficient.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on answering the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Explain your ideas with specific examples and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid unclear or unrelated information to keep your answer relevant and coherent.

例: I find it difficult to use a computer when its functions are too complicated for me. For instance, some software has many features that I do not understand, which makes it hard to use the computer effectively.

× I would say when I go to school, the teacher always ask us to do the assignment or the school project.

✓ I would say when I go to school, the teacher always asks us to do the assignment or the school project.

The subject 'teacher' is singular, so the verb should be 'asks' to agree with the singular subject. In English, singular third-person subjects require verbs ending with 's' in the present tense.

× The first time when I use a computer when I was in secondary school it at that time my mom had bought a computer for me for studying, so she know it clearly that I might need computer a lot for though the assignment or the school project.

✓ The first time I used a computer was when I was in secondary school. At that time, my mom had bought a computer for me for studying, so she knew clearly that I might need a computer a lot for doing the assignment or the school project.

The sentence mixes present tense 'use' with past context; it should be 'used' to match past time. Also, 'know' should be 'knew' to agree with past tense. Additionally, 'for though the assignment' is incorrect; it should be 'for doing the assignment'. These corrections ensure consistent past tense and proper verb forms.

× so she know it clearly that I might need computer a lot for though the assignment or the school project.

✓ so she knew clearly that I might need a computer a lot for doing the assignment or the school project.

The preposition 'for though' is incorrect; it should be 'for doing' to indicate purpose. Also, 'computer' needs an article 'a' because it is countable and singular here.

× Also it can help me to prepare for the presentation and.

✓ Also, it can help me to prepare for the presentation.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× Without a computer my life will be bored and so much complicated because I find out that computer I play in an important role for my studying.

✓ Without a computer, my life would be boring and much more complicated because I find that the computer plays an important role in my studying.

'Will be bored' is incorrect; 'would be boring' is appropriate for hypothetical situations. 'So much complicated' should be 'much more complicated' for correct comparative form. 'I find out' should be 'I find' for present tense. 'Computer I play' is incorrect; it should be 'the computer plays' to show subject-verb agreement and article use.

× For example, I would say I usually use computer for creating a presentation slide or complete assignment which I find out it is very helpful and make me feel more easy.

✓ For example, I usually use a computer to create presentation slides or complete assignments, which I find very helpful and makes me feel more at ease.

'Use computer for creating' should be 'use a computer to create' for correct verb and article usage. 'Complete assignment' should be plural 'assignments' with article 'a' if singular. 'Find out it is' should be 'find it' for correct verb usage. 'Make me feel more easy' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel more at ease'.

× Ask how many condition that I think it would be difficult for me to use a computer, but when I interested the most would be it's functions.

✓ If you ask how many conditions I think would make it difficult for me to use a computer, I would say the most challenging is its functions.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Ask how many condition that I think' is incorrect sentence structure. It needs a proper conditional clause and subject-verb agreement. 'When I interested' is incorrect; it should be 'I am interested' or rephrased as above. 'It's functions' should be 'its functions' without apostrophe for possessive pronoun.

× Computer has so many functions that the user can create something and use it as an entertaining device.

✓ Computers have so many functions that users can create things and use them as entertaining devices.

'Computer has' should be plural 'Computers have' to generalize. 'The user' should be plural 'users' to match plural subject. 'Create something' is vague; 'create things' is better. 'Use it' should be 'use them' to agree with plural 'things' or 'devices'.