Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，存在重复和错误，如“a lot of works”应为“a lot of work”，“It is the my necessary”表达不清。建议简洁明了地表达，避免语法错误。

例: I use a computer frequently at work because I am a clerk in a tech company, and most of my tasks require using a computer.

提案: 回答较完整，但有些表达不自然，如“in the middle school”应为“in middle school”，“present gift”重复。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当丰富细节。

例: The first time I used a computer was in middle school when my parents bought one as a gift. I was very excited to learn how to use it.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，逻辑不清晰。建议先明确主题句，再用连词连接具体细节，表达清晰且有条理。

例: Without a computer, I would have to do all my work manually, which would waste a lot of paper and take much more time. It would be very inconvenient.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法和词汇使用错误，如“quicker key”应为“shortcut keys”，“combination combinations”重复。建议用准确词汇表达并简洁说明困难。

例: I find it difficult to use a computer when I have to remember many shortcut key combinations, as they can be confusing.

× a lot of works should be done on the computer.

✓ a lot of work should be done on the computer.

“work”作为不可数名词，表示工作量时不加复数形式“works”。

× It is the my necessary.

✓ It is my necessity.

“the my”是错误的定冠词和物主代词连用，应去掉“the”，并用名词“necessity”替代形容词“necessary”。

× When I was in the middle school, my parents bought the computer for me as a present gift.

✓ When I was in middle school, my parents bought a computer for me as a present.

“middle school”前不加定冠词“the”；“the computer”改为不定冠词“a computer”；“present gift”重复，去掉“gift”。

× Maybe we should do a lot of work all by myself and we could use and waste a lot of papers while doing the work.

✓ Maybe we should do a lot of work all by ourselves and we could use and waste a lot of paper while doing the work.

“myself”应改为复数形式“ourselves”以匹配主语“we”；“papers”作为不可数名词“paper”表示纸张时不加复数。

× Sometimes it is so convenient it won't be so.

✓ Sometimes it is so convenient that it won't be so.

缺少连词“that”导致句子结构不完整，应加上“that”连接主从句。

× Maybe I think there's a quicker key is the most important and difficult part for me to use a computer, because I should remember a lot of combination combinations.

✓ Maybe I think the shortcut keys are the most important and difficult part for me to use a computer, because I have to remember a lot of key combinations.

“there's a quicker key”结构错误，应改为“the shortcut keys”；“combination combinations”重复，应改为“key combinations”；“should”改为“have to”更符合语境。