Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和句子不完整的问题，建议使用完整句子并注意时态和主谓一致，同时避免句子碎片。可以适当使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: I use a computer when I need to finish my work, attend online meetings, or design projects. Additionally, computers are great for entertainment, such as watching movies or playing games.

提案: 回答中句子结构不完整，且表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达时间和活动内容，并使用连接词使句子流畅。

例: I first used a computer when I was about six years old because there was one at home. I usually used it to play simple games, chat with others, and plan activities.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，建议使用完整句子，避免断句，清晰表达观点，并使用连接词。

例: Actually, I don't think my life would change much without a computer because nowadays people can use smartphones. With smartphones, people can solve many issues even without artificial intelligence.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但存在语法错误，如主谓不一致。建议注意语法准确性，并尝试丰富表达内容。

例: I find it difficult to use a computer in places without electricity because my computer needs power. Without electricity, I cannot use it for a long time.

× I use a computer when I need to finish my work. Attend online meetings or design project.

✓ I use a computer when I need to finish my work, attend online meetings, or design projects.

原句中“Attend online meetings or design project”缺少主语，导致句子结构不完整。应将其与前句合并，形成并列结构，且“design project”应为复数形式“design projects”。

× Computers are also great for entertainment such as watch movies or gaming.

✓ Computers are also great for entertainment such as watching movies or gaming.

“such as”后面应接动名词形式，表示具体的娱乐活动，因此“watch”应改为“watching”。

× Because there was one at home and I usually use computer to plan.

✓ Because there was one at home and I usually used the computer to play.

句子描述过去的情况，动词“use”应使用过去时“used”。另外，“plan”应为“play”，且“computer”前应加定冠词“the”。

× Simple games or chatting with others.

✓ I played simple games or chatted with others.

该句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子不完整。应补充主语和谓语，使句子完整。

× Because nowadays people have smartphones.

✓ Actually, I don't think there would be a big change in my life because nowadays people have smartphones.

“Because nowadays people have smartphones.”是一个不完整的句子，应与前句合并，形成完整的复合句。

× Without the artificial intelligence, people can solve.

✓ Without artificial intelligence, people can solve any issues with smartphones.

“people can solve.”句子不完整，缺少宾语。应将“any issues”与句子合并，形成完整句子。

× Any issues? With smartphones.

✓ Without artificial intelligence, people can solve any issues with smartphones.

“Any issues? With smartphones.”是断句错误，应合并为完整句子。

× because my computer need electricity.

✓ because my computer needs electricity.

主语“computer”是单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“needs”。

× Without electricity, I can't use it for a long time.

✓ Without electricity, I can't use it for long.

“for a long time”在此处表达持续时间时，通常简化为“for long”。