Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子不完整且断断续续，缺乏连贯性。建议使用完整句子并用连接词使表达更流畅，同时避免重复和冗余。

例: I use a computer mainly to complete projects and design assessments. Additionally, I attend online meetings using it. Computers are also great for entertainment, such as watching movies and playing games.

提案: 回答较为完整，但第二句结构不够自然，且缺少连接词。建议使用连贯的句子结构，并适当丰富细节。

例: I first used a computer when I was about six years old because there was one at home. I usually played simple games on it and enjoyed exploring different programs.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议理清思路，使用完整句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Without computers, I think my life would not change much because I can use my smartphone to complete many tasks. Nowadays, with the help of artificial intelligence, smartphones can easily replace some computer functions.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误，句子不够连贯。建议使用完整句子，注意拼写，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer in places without electricity because my computer needs to be charged. Without power, I cannot turn it on or use it for a long time.

× I use computer to finish project.

✓ I use a computer to finish projects.

computer和project都是可数名词，单数时需要加冠词a，且project应使用复数形式projects，因为通常有多个项目。

× And design assessment.

✓ I also design assessments.

句子缺少主语和谓语，导致结构不完整，应补充完整句子。

× As well as attend online.

✓ I also attend online meetings.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，导致表达不清，应补充完整内容。

× Future meetings.

✓ I attend future meetings online.

单独的短语不能作为完整句子，应合并为完整句子。

× Computers are great.

✓ Computers are great for entertainment such as watching movies and gaming.

原句断开，导致表达不连贯，应合并句子使表达完整。

× For entertainment such as watching movies and gaming.

✓ For entertainment such as watching movies and playing games.

gaming作为动名词用法不当，改为playing games更符合习惯表达。

× Because there was one at home, I usually play simple games on it and enjoy exploring different programs.

✓ Because there was one at home, I usually played simple games on it and enjoyed exploring different programs.

描述过去习惯动作时，动词应使用过去时态。

× Because there. A smartphone?

✓ Because there is a smartphone.

句子断裂且有疑问句标点，导致表达不清，应改为完整陈述句。

× Because my computer usually needs to be charged without electricity.

✓ Because my computer usually needs to be charged, without electricity,

句子表达不清，缺少逗号分隔，且“without electricity”位置不当，应调整使句意明确。

× I cannot p it on and use it for long time.

✓ I cannot put it on and use it for a long time.

单词“p”应为“put”，且“long time”前需加不定冠词a。