Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I usually use a computer after finishing my tasks because it is very convenient. For example, I submit my assignments online and watch movies in my free time.

提案: 回答中信息表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议先明确时间点，再描述相关细节，避免无关信息。

例: The first time I used a computer was in the first grade of primary school. My father bought a large Samsung computer for our home, which took up a lot of space.

提案: 回答内容不完整且表达混乱，建议直接说明没有电脑生活的影响，并用具体例子支持观点。

例: Life without a computer would be inconvenient because I rely on it for work and entertainment. For instance, I use my iPad with a Bluetooth keyboard to study and communicate.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，建议明确说明具体困难的情况，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Using a computer is usually easy for me because I am skilled. However, during personal class tests, I feel nervous and find it difficult to manage the computer properly.

× I have to use the computer first one days after do my tasks and ***** on the computer is very convenient and should a sub submit my subject on the on the network and then I will watch some movies.

✓ I have to use the computer on the first day after doing my tasks, and using the computer is very convenient. I should submit my subject on the network, and then I will watch some movies.

这里“first one days”应为“first day”，因为“day”是单数。动词“do”后应使用动名词形式“doing”。句子中缺少主语和谓语的正确搭配，需调整句子结构。

× I have to use the computer first one days after do my tasks and ***** on the computer is very convenient and should a sub submit my subject on the on the network and then I will watch some movies.

✓ I have to use the computer on the first day after doing my tasks, and using the computer is very convenient. I should submit my subject on the network, and then I will watch some movies.

“on the first day”是正确的时间介词短语，原句缺少介词“on”。“submit my subject on the on the network”中“on the on the”重复，应改为“on the network”。

× I still remember that was my first grade of my primary school and my father bought a computer in my home which planet does Samsung and it's already large and the utilize a large space on my.

✓ I still remember that it was my first grade of primary school, and my father bought a Samsung computer for my home. It was already large and utilized a large space in my house.

“was”用于过去时，需加“it”作为主语。动词“utilize”应使用过去式“utilized”。“in my home”更自然表达为“for my home”或“in my house”。

× I still remember that was my first grade of my primary school and my father bought a computer in my home which planet does Samsung and it's already large and the utilize a large space on my.

✓ I still remember that it was my first grade of primary school, and my father bought a Samsung computer for my home. It was already large and utilized a large space in my house.

“which planet does Samsung”表达不清，应改为“a Samsung computer”。“it”指代电脑，需明确。

× I think it will be a little bit inconvenient spend that much because I was so used in iPad so I I could match it to a Bluetooth a Bluetooth keyboard and then it has a SIM function with.

✓ I think it will be a little bit inconvenient to spend that much because I am so used to the iPad. I can connect it to a Bluetooth keyboard, and it also has a SIM function.

“used in iPad”应为“used to the iPad”，表示习惯于某物。动词“spend”后应加不定式“to spend”。“match it to”应改为“connect it to”。

× I think it will be a little bit inconvenient spend that much because I was so used in iPad so I I could match it to a Bluetooth a Bluetooth keyboard and then it has a SIM function with.

✓ I think it will be a little bit inconvenient to spend that much because I am so used to the iPad. I can connect it to a Bluetooth keyboard, and it also has a SIM function.

描述现在习惯时应使用现在时“am used to”，而非过去时“was used”。

× In total, using computer is really easy for me because I'm really good at it. But when I was a. When I was doing my Person class tests, I will I feel very strange and I cannot manage manage my computer.

✓ In general, using a computer is really easy for me because I'm really good at it. But when I was doing my personal class tests, I felt very strange and could not manage my computer.

“I will I feel”时态混乱，应统一为过去时“I felt”。“cannot”过去时为“could not”。“Person class tests”应为“personal class tests”。

× In total, using computer is really easy for me because I'm really good at it. But when I was a. When I was doing my Person class tests, I will I feel very strange and I cannot manage manage my computer.

✓ In general, using a computer is really easy for me because I'm really good at it. But when I was doing my personal class tests, I felt very strange and could not manage my computer.

“using computer”应为“using a computer”，因为“computer”是可数名词，单数时需冠词。