Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and shows enthusiasm, but it has some grammatical errors, redundancy, and lacks coherence. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correcting verb tenses, and adding one specific detail or example. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and use linking words like 'so' or 'because' if needed.

例: Yes, I love drawing. I started taking lessons when I was a child, so now I draw whenever I have free time. For example, last week I sketched scenes from a park for two hours. Drawing helps me relax and develop my observation skills.

提案: The answer communicates interest but contains grammatical mistakes and some repetition. Make the opening sentence more natural, fix tense and article usage, and combine ideas with linking words. Add one concrete detail about what you enjoy seeing in galleries to make it more specific.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries. Whenever there is an exhibition in my city, I make a point of going because I like studying different styles. I particularly enjoy contemporary paintings and the way artists use color to express emotion.

提案: Good enthusiasm but the sentence is repetitive and uses informal language ('cause'). Use a clearer structure: state your intention, give a reason, and add a specific area you'd like to learn. Use formal linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

例: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it inspires me. In particular, I want to study color theory and modern techniques to improve my own paintings.

提案: The idea is clear, but grammar and phrasing are weak (incorrect tense, awkward expressions). Use past tense consistently and replace vague phrases ('keep in the memory everything's') with specific descriptions of what you learned. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'and' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I learned drawing as a child. I attended art classes where I practiced techniques such as shading and perspective, which helped me remember how to construct shapes accurately.

× When I was a child I learned drawing and now every day when I get any free time I just take a pen and paper and sit down for any type of drawing.

✓ When I was a child I learned to draw, and now every day when I get any free time I just take a pen and paper and sit down to draw.

The original uses 'learned drawing' which is incorrect collocation. After 'learn' we use the infinitive 'to draw' or the gerund 'drawing' in different structures; here 'learned to draw' is natural. Also 'sit down for any type of drawing' is unnatural; use 'sit down to draw.' Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× Yes, I love to go to gallery the most actually, when in our country any art exhibition is hold, I just make myself to go there.

✓ Yes, I love to go to the gallery the most actually; when any art exhibition is held in our country, I make sure to go there.

Use the definite article 'the gallery' for a specific place. 'Any art exhibition is hold' has two errors: 'hold' should be the past participle 'held' after 'is' (passive), and word order 'in our country' should follow natural placement. 'I just make myself to go' is unidiomatic; use 'I make sure to go.' Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses.

× I take time and I explore everything in the art gallery.

✓ I take my time and explore everything in the art gallery.

The phrase 'take time' is incomplete; native usage is 'take my time.' Also remove the second 'I' for smoother sentence flow: 'I take my time and explore...'. 'The art gallery' is correct if referring to a specific gallery.

× It's my it's very close to my heart.

✓ It's very close to my heart.

The original repeats 'it's' and creates an awkward structure. Remove the extra fragment so the sentence is a single clear clause.

× Yes, I want to learn about more and more about art cause art is very close to my heart and it inspires me a lot.

✓ Yes, I want to learn more and more about art because art is very close to my heart and it inspires me a lot.

'Learn about more and more about' is redundant and incorrectly ordered; use 'learn more and more about.' Use 'because' instead of informal 'cause.' Sentence otherwise fine.

× Yes, I learn drawing.

✓ Yes, I learned to draw.

The question asked 'Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?' which requires past tense in the answer. Use past tense 'learned' and correct collocation 'learned to draw.'

× When I was a child I was used to go to learning school and used to learn the techniques, how to draw and how to keep in the memory everything's.

✓ When I was a child I used to go to a drawing school and learn techniques: how to draw and how to remember everything.

Use 'used to' followed by base verb 'go' (not 'was used to go'). 'Learning school' is unnatural; 'drawing school' or 'art school' fits. 'Used to learn the techniques' is repetitive; simplify to 'learn techniques.' 'How to keep in the memory everything's' is ungrammatical; use 'how to remember everything.' Remove the apostrophe in 'everything's.'