Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid contradictory statements. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary to make your answer natural and effective.

例: Actually, I don't like drawing because I'm not very good at it, but I enjoy buying paintings and artwork.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, try to provide more specific details.

例: Yes, I like to visit galleries when I travel abroad. If there is a gallery nearby, I always take the opportunity to explore it because I enjoy seeing different styles of art.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly and clearly, using proper grammar and vocabulary. Also, provide reasons or explanations to support your answer.

例: I would like to learn more about art, but recently I haven't had much time to study it. However, I enjoy learning about art whenever I can.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Avoid unclear references and incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear and complete response with supporting details.

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid. Like most children, I found it fun, especially until I started getting grades for it, which made it a bit stressful.

× Actually I don't like drawing because I can do this well, but I love to buy the drawing picture.

✓ Actually I don't like drawing because I can't do it well, but I love to buy drawings.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'because I can do this well' which contradicts the intended meaning. It should be 'because I can't do it well' to express dislike due to lack of skill. Also, 'the drawing picture' is unnatural; 'drawings' is more appropriate. The conjunction 'but' is correctly used to contrast the dislike of drawing with the love of buying drawings.

× Yes, if I have opportunities when I travel abroad, if there are gallery nearby, I take a chance to visit.

✓ Yes, if I have opportunities when I travel abroad, and if there is a gallery nearby, I take the chance to visit.

The sentence lacks proper conjunction between the two 'if' clauses; 'and' is needed to connect them. 'Gallery' is singular and requires the article 'a'. Also, 'take a chance' is better as 'take the chance' in this context to indicate a specific opportunity.

× About art, actually I don't have time to learn about the other thing much this day, so I just enjoyed did learn it.

✓ About art, actually I don't have much time to learn about other things these days, so I just enjoy learning it.

'The other thing much this day' is incorrect; it should be 'much time' and 'other things' plural. 'This day' should be 'these days' to indicate current time. 'Just enjoyed did learn it' is ungrammatical; it should be 'just enjoy learning it' to express current habit.

× Yeah sure, ISIS thing. Almost every kids have the experience to learn how to. Drawing for me is really fun until you get your grade.

✓ Yeah sure, it's this thing. Almost every kid has the experience of learning how to draw. Drawing for me was really fun until I got my grade.

'ISIS thing' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'it's this thing'. 'Almost every kids' should be 'Almost every kid' (singular). 'Have' changes to 'has' for subject-verb agreement. 'Experience to learn how to' should be 'experience of learning how to draw'. The last sentence is past tense, so 'is' changes to 'was' and 'you get your grade' to 'I got my grade' to maintain consistency and correct pronoun use.