Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid repeating words. Also, keep your answer concise and clear by limiting it to 3-4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I loved drawing my favorite anime characters when I was a child. However, as I grew older, I gradually shifted my interests to other hobbies. Drawing is still something I enjoy occasionally.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by removing filler words like 'umm' and by using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add specific details about what you explore in galleries.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries, especially when I travel. For example, whenever I visit a new city, I usually explore the local art galleries to learn about the culture and see unique artworks.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use conditional sentences correctly and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and link your ideas clearly.

例: If I had the opportunity, I would love to learn more about art. However, as a working mother, I currently don't have much free time. Still, I often browse art posts on Facebook to appreciate different styles.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler sounds and ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child. In grade school, my teachers taught us basic drawing skills. I was especially proud when I could draw my favorite anime characters accurately.

× Yes, when I was a kid I remember I love to draw my favorite anime, but as I go older it became less and I I tried to do some other things like I've shifted my hobby.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I remember I loved to draw my favorite anime, but as I got older it became less and I tried to do some other things like I shifted my hobby.

The verb 'love' should be in the past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame 'when I was a kid'. 'Go older' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'got older'. 'I've shifted' is present perfect, but the context requires simple past 'I shifted' to maintain consistent past narration.

× I like to go to the gallery, especially when I am traveling. For instance, I visit one place, I usually umm, have a look at the local gallery and discover or explore the things.

✓ I like to go to the gallery, especially when I am traveling. For instance, when I visit a place, I usually have a look at the local gallery and discover or explore things.

The phrase 'I visit one place' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should be 'when I visit a place' to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'the things' is vague and unnecessary; 'things' without 'the' is more natural here.

× If I'm giving an opportunity, I would like to learn more about art, but since I am a working mom right now, I don't have any time learning about art, but I usually check on my Facebook and appreciate some arts.

✓ If I were given an opportunity, I would like to learn more about art, but since I am a working mom right now, I don't have any time to learn about art, but I usually check my Facebook and appreciate some art.

The conditional phrase should be 'If I were given an opportunity' to express a hypothetical situation correctly. 'I don't have any time learning' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't have any time to learn' using the infinitive form. 'Check on my Facebook' is better as 'check my Facebook'. 'Some arts' is incorrect; 'art' is uncountable here.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I tried to learn how to draw. Basically at grade school, the teachers would teach us how to draw, but I was amazed with, uh, the thought that I know how to draw my favorite characters in anime. So I, I was I.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I tried to learn how to draw. Basically, at grade school, the teachers would teach us how to draw, but I was amazed by the thought that I knew how to draw my favorite characters in anime.

The phrase 'I know' should be in past tense 'I knew' to match the past context. 'Amazed with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'amazed by'. The last fragment 'So I, I was I.' is incomplete and should be omitted for clarity.