Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by directly stating your interest and adding specific details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing, especially in my spare time. For example, I often create sketches that capture the beauty of nature, such as trees and flowers, which helps me relax and express my creativity.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and adding specific details with linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because they display many drawings that convey meaningful messages. For instance, some artworks highlight social issues, which makes the visit both interesting and thought-provoking.

提案: Avoid vague expressions and improve sentence structure. Provide clear reasons and use linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: No, I don't want to study art in depth because I prefer to enjoy it casually. However, I like creating art in my free time since it helps me relax and express myself creatively.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Provide specific details and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child. For example, in kindergarten, I participated in a drawing competition and was happy to win first place, which encouraged me to continue drawing.

× Yes, I really like drawings because in my spare time I also create new drawings about the nature's beauty.

✓ Yes, I really like drawing because in my spare time I also create new drawings about nature's beauty.

The word 'drawings' is plural but the context suggests a general liking for the activity, so 'drawing' (singular, uncountable) is more appropriate. Also, 'the nature's beauty' is incorrect because 'nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the' or possessive 's here.

× Yes, I like to go to the gallery because there are number of drawings which have meaningful message.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the gallery because there are a number of drawings which have meaningful messages.

The phrase 'there are number of drawings' is missing the article 'a' before 'number'. Also, 'meaningful message' should be plural 'meaningful messages' to agree with the plural 'drawings'.

× No, I do not want to learn more about the art because I am not interested in too much, but I really like to do art in my spare time.

✓ No, I do not want to learn more about art because I am not too interested, but I really like to do art in my spare time.

The word 'art' is uncountable and does not need the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'interested in too much' is incorrect; it should be 'not too interested' to express lack of interest properly.

× Yes, when I was child, I learnt the rhyme in my kindergarten school and I participate in drawing competition.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I learnt a rhyme in my kindergarten school and I participated in a drawing competition.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. 'The rhyme' should be 'a rhyme' unless a specific rhyme is known. 'I participate' should be past tense 'I participated' to match the past context. 'Drawing competition' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Then I got a first position.

✓ Then I got first position.

The phrase 'a first position' is incorrect; 'first position' is used without an article. The past tense 'got' is correct here.