Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of saying "it is a skill which is very helpful to use our free time and it is also helpful for the stressful mind," you could say "I enjoy drawing because it helps me relax and makes good use of my free time."

例: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it helps me relax and makes good use of my free time. It also allows me to express my creativity and reduce stress.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Instead of "there are so many things which attract me," you could say "there are many artworks that captivate me." Also, explain why you feel relaxed to add depth.

例: Yes, I like to go to the gallery because there are many artworks that captivate me, and viewing them helps me feel calm and inspired.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like "uh" and be more specific. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, "Yes, I want to learn more about art because it will expand my knowledge and help me improve my drawing skills."

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because it will expand my knowledge and help me improve my drawing skills, allowing me to create more detailed and expressive works.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more natural and grammatically correct. For example, say "when I was a kid" and "new methods of drawing." Also, add linking words to improve flow.

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid because it was part of my school curriculum. Moreover, my drawing teacher always introduced us to new methods, which made the classes interesting.

× my drawing teacher always taught us a new methods of drawing.

✓ my drawing teacher always taught us new methods of drawing.

The phrase 'a new methods' is incorrect because 'methods' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'new methods' without 'a'. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers (ID 14).

× Yes, I learned drawing when I was kid.

✓ Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid.

The phrase 'when I was kid' is missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'kid'. The correct form is 'when I was a kid'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1).