Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 동사의 시제를 일관되게 사용하며, 중복 표현을 피하세요. 예를 들어, 'I like drawing animals, especially dogs, because I find them cute and pretty. Drawing them makes me happy.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I like drawing animals, especially dogs, because I find them cute and pretty. Drawing them makes me happy.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 연결어를 적절히 사용하고 문장을 명확하게 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I study design. They give me a chance to see artworks from around the world.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I study design. They give me a chance to see artworks from around the world.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 일부 단어 사용이 부적절합니다('leaking' 대신 'lighting'일 가능성 있음). 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 하며, 관련 용어를 정확히 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I want to learn more about art, especially 3D animation, including lighting, concept art, and character design.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art, especially 3D animation, including lighting, concept art, and character design.

提案: 문법 오류가 많고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 시제와 단수/복수 형태를 정확히 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I have been drawing a lot because of my major. I started learning art when I was in elementary school. It has always been my big dream.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I have been drawing a lot because of my major. I started learning art when I was in elementary school. It has always been my big dream.

× Dog is so cute and pretty I think so I am happy when I was drawing many dogs.

✓ Dogs are so cute and pretty, I think so. I am happy when I draw many dogs.

The word 'Dog' should be plural 'Dogs' to match the context of liking multiple animals. Also, 'was drawing' should be 'draw' to maintain present tense consistency. The sentence needed commas for clarity.

× So gallery gives me a chance to look a lot of works around the world.

✓ So the gallery gives me a chance to see a lot of works from around the world.

The phrase 'look a lot of works' is incorrect; 'see a lot of works' is appropriate. Also, 'around the world' should be preceded by 'from' to indicate origin. 'Gallery' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I want to learn about leaking or concept art or character design.

✓ I want to learn about lighting, concept art, or character design.

The word 'leaking' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'lighting,' which is relevant in animation. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× I started art when I was a elementary school students.

✓ I started art when I was an elementary school student.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Students' should be singular 'student' to agree with 'I was.'

× because of my major I always drawing in many times.

✓ Because of my major, I am always drawing many times.

The phrase 'I always drawing' is incorrect; it should be 'I am always drawing' to use the present continuous tense. Also, 'in many times' is awkward; 'many times' alone suffices. A comma is needed after the introductory phrase.