Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且存在语法和用词错误，例如“like John”不明确且不合适，建议使用更准确的表达方式，并且回答应更简洁，避免冗余。

例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it helps me feel calm and inspires my creativity.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“There's various peaceful arts”应改为“there are various peaceful artworks”，同时应避免重复“arts”，并且句子结构需更流畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because seeing different artworks inspires my creativity and helps me relax.

提案: 回答中有明显的词汇和语法错误，如“arts always hurt me to boast”表达不当，应使用正确的动词和短语，建议使用更准确和自然的表达。

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because it helps me generate new ideas and improves my creativity, which benefits my career. Also, art helps me relax and think deeply.

提案: 回答中存在严重语法错误和用词错误，如“when I was our kid”应为“when I was a kid”，“learned John”不明确且错误，且“hospitable to her me”表达混乱，建议使用正确的句子结构和词汇。

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid. I had a professional and patient teacher who helped me improve my skills.

× I like John every time when I join something I can feel my inner peace.

✓ I like drawing because every time I do it, I can feel my inner peace.

原句中“I like John”中的“John”应为“drawing”，因为上下文讨论的是绘画。动词时态和表达方式也不符合习惯，应使用一般现在时描述习惯性动作。

× Additionally, John can also create lots of new ideas for me.

✓ Additionally, drawing can also create lots of new ideas for me.

“John”应为“drawing”，因为前文提到的是绘画，使用错误的代词导致句意不明。

× There's various peaceful arts to improve my creativity when I visit and watch lots of arts, which is very beneficial for me to.

✓ There are various peaceful artworks to improve my creativity when I visit and watch lots of art, which is very beneficial for me too.

“There's”是“there is”的缩写，后面应接单数名词，但“various peaceful arts”是复数，应使用“there are”。另外，“arts”应统一为“artworks”或“art”，且“to”应为“too”。

× First of all, I believe arts always hurt me to boast lots of new ideas and creativity, which is quite beneficial for my professional career.

✓ First of all, I believe art always helps me to generate lots of new ideas and creativity, which is quite beneficial for my professional career.

“hurt me to boast”表达错误，应为“helps me to generate”，意思是“帮助我产生”，且“arts”应为不可数名词“art”。

× He is very nice and hospitable to her me improve my drawing skills.

✓ He is very nice and hospitable to help me improve my drawing skills.

“to her me”是错误的，应为“to help me”，表示“帮助我”。