Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you find drawing difficult, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: I don't enjoy drawing because I find it difficult to capture people's features accurately, especially faces. Moreover, colouring can be quite challenging for me.

提案: Your enthusiasm is clear, but your answer needs to be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, be specific about what you like about galleries.

例: Yes, I love visiting galleries because the artwork is often beautiful and inspiring. I often go to a museum near my house to enjoy the exhibitions.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and structured. Use linking words to explain your opinion and avoid repeating words. Try to express your feelings more precisely.

例: I don't want to study art in depth because it seems like a complex subject. However, I enjoy simply visiting galleries and appreciating the beauty of the artworks.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Start with a direct response, then explain your experience using linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and improve grammar.

例: No, I never had the opportunity to learn drawing as a child. I preferred visiting galleries and didn't feel motivated to draw or improve my skills.

× I don't like drawing something because it's so hard to draw like persons, like the features of persons like face, or it's hard to color.

✓ I don't like drawing because it's so hard to draw people, like the features of a person's face, or it's hard to colour.

The phrase 'drawing something' is unnatural here; 'drawing' as a gerund without 'something' is more appropriate. 'Persons' is less common than 'people' in this context. Also, 'like face' should be 'a person's face' to specify the feature. 'Colour' is the British English spelling.

× I like only watch the art or a gallery because there is so beautiful and gorgeous.

✓ I only like to watch art or visit galleries because they are so beautiful and gorgeous.

The phrase 'like only watch' is incorrect; 'only like to watch' or 'like only to watch' is better. 'A gallery' should be plural 'galleries' or 'visit galleries' to make sense. 'There is so beautiful' is incorrect; it should be 'they are so beautiful' referring to art or galleries.

× I often go museum near the my my house.

✓ I often go to the museum near my house.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. 'The my my house' is incorrect; it should be 'my house' without 'the' and no repetition.

× I think the art is so deep, deep subject, so it's hard to learn for me.

✓ I think art is a very deep subject, so it's hard for me to learn.

'The art' is incorrect; 'art' as a general concept does not need 'the'. 'Deep, deep subject' is repetitive; 'a very deep subject' is better. 'Hard to learn for me' should be 'hard for me to learn' for correct word order.

× So I prefer only watch that gallery and I think so beautiful.

✓ So I prefer only to watch that gallery, and I think it is so beautiful.

'Prefer only watch' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer only to watch'. 'I think so beautiful' is incomplete; it should be 'I think it is so beautiful'.

× No, I don't have any opportunity to learn drawing.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunity to learn drawing.

The question is about the past ('when you were a kid'), so the answer should be in past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; 'didn't have' is correct.

× I love before I said what I love just watching the gallery so and also I don't have any feeling like I want to Draw Something or I want to improve my drawing skills.

✓ As I said before, I just love watching galleries, and I also don't have any feeling like I want to draw something or improve my drawing skills.

The original sentence is confusing and has incorrect word order. 'I love before I said what I love' is unclear; 'As I said before' is clearer. 'Watching the gallery' should be 'watching galleries'. 'Draw Something' should be 'draw something' (lowercase). The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.