Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢绘画的观点，但存在语法错误和表达不够自然的问题。例如，“I like draw”应为“I like to draw”或“I like drawing”。此外，例子部分表达不够清晰，建议使用更具体和连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I like drawing. Although I have never received formal training, I often draw pictures in my daily life. For example, I once drew a portrait of my husband, and he said it looked very similar to him.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，如“if I have opportunity to other cities”应为“if I have the opportunity to visit other cities”。此外，表达中有重复和口语填充词“umm”，建议减少使用，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries. Although my small city doesn't have any, I always visit galleries when I travel to bigger cities like Beijing or Shenzhen. I especially like seeing contemporary art and famous artifacts there.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子结构略显重复，建议使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。同时，“fulfill my daily life”表达不够准确，可以改为“enrich my daily life”。

例: Yes, definitely. I want to learn more about art because I didn't have access to formal art education when I was younger. Now that I have more time and resources, I hope to improve my understanding of art and enrich my daily life.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“we also have umm class learning watercolor and some”不完整且含糊。建议使用完整句子，避免口语填充词，表达更清晰。

例: Yes, I learned some drawing skills when I was a child. I remember in primary school, we learned basic techniques like drawing simple line pictures, and we also had classes where we practiced watercolor painting.

× I like draw some pictures in my daily life.

✓ I like drawing some pictures in my daily life.

动词like后面应接动名词形式drawing，而不是动词原形draw。

× I have drawn poetry of my husband and he told me that it is very similar to to him.

✓ I have drawn a portrait of my husband and he told me that it is very similar to him.

这里应使用介词of表示“某人的画像”，且原句中重复了to，应删除多余的to。

× Although I live in a small city where there is no gallery here, I always visit the gallery if I have opportunity to other cities like Beijing and Shenzhen,

✓ Although I live in a small city where there is no gallery, I always visit galleries if I have the opportunity to go to other cities like Beijing and Shenzhen.

句中no gallery here中here多余，应去掉；opportunity前应加定冠词the；动词visit后应接复数galleries；动词go缺失，应补充。

× I always visit the gallery if I have opportunity to other cities like Beijing and Shenzhen,

✓ I always visit the gallery if I have the opportunity to go to other cities like Beijing and Shenzhen,

opportunity前应加定冠词the，表示特定的机会。

× When I was younger, I didn't have access to formal arts education.

✓ When I was younger, I didn't have access to formal art education.

art education是不可数名词，arts education不正确。

× Now I have enough time and money, I want to learn more about art to improve my ability to understand art and fulfill my daily life.

✓ Now I have enough time and money, I want to learn more about art to improve my ability to understand art and enrich my daily life.

fulfill my daily life用法不当，应该用enrich（丰富）更合适。

× Yes, when I was a kid I learned some drawing skills I remember when I was in primary school umm we learned some basic skills about drawing simple line picture and we also have umm class learning watercolor and some.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I learned some drawing skills. I remember when I was in primary school, we learned some basic skills about drawing simple line pictures and we also had classes learning watercolor and more.

learned后应加句号分隔句子；line picture应为复数line pictures；have应改为过去式had；class应为复数classes；some后应补充内容或用more。