Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'drying' thay vì 'drawing', 'hard spent' thay vì 'have spent'). Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu đúng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có thể được rút gọn để tránh lặp lại.

例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing. I have spent quite a bit of money on art supplies like brushes and color palettes to improve my skills.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'hasn't' nên là 'haven't'. Câu trả lời có thể được làm rõ và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ hợp lý và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn như 'affordable' thay vì 'cheap' để thể hiện sự trang trọng hơn.

例: Yes, I would like to visit galleries. Although I haven't been to any yet, I plan to visit some local ones soon because they are nearby and the entrance fees are quite affordable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng thì đúng hơn (ví dụ: 'helped' nên là 'helps'). Bạn cũng nên sử dụng các liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'learn'.

例: Yes, I definitely want to learn more about art because it helps me relax and boosts my creativity. I plan to do this by joining my school's art club and following my favorite artists on Instagram.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất tốt về mặt nội dung và cấu trúc. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'learned drawing'.

例: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I took art classes taught by my mom, who is an art teacher, so she greatly helped me improve my drawing skills. Additionally, my friends and grandparents encouraged me to practice regularly and gave me useful tips.

× Well honestly I am a big fan of drying.

✓ Well honestly I am a big fan of drawing.

The word 'drying' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'drawing' which is the present participle form of the verb 'draw'. The error is a spelling mistake leading to a wrong word choice.

× I hard spent a lot of money on buying some drawing tools like brushes or palette color to improve my art skills every single day.

✓ I have spent a lot of money on buying some drawing tools like brushes or palette colors to improve my art skills every single day.

The phrase 'I hard spent' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I have spent' to indicate a past action with present relevance. Also, 'palette color' should be plural 'palette colors' to match the plural 'brushes'.

× Yes, of course, although I hasn't visited the galleries before.

✓ Yes, of course, although I haven't visited the galleries before.

The auxiliary verb 'hasn't' is incorrect with the pronoun 'I'. The correct form is 'haven't' for first person singular.

× However, in the near future I will try to visit the galleries in my local areas because the distance is quite near from my house and is approachable too because the cost is quite cheap.

✓ However, in the near future I will try to visit the galleries in my local area because the distance is quite near my house and is approachable too because the cost is quite cheap.

The phrase 'in my local areas' should be 'in my local area' as 'area' is usually singular in this context. Also, 'near from my house' is incorrect; 'near my house' is correct without 'from'.

× Oh yes, of course, I always want to learn more about art because it helped me relax and improve my creativity, while I will learn about art by participating in my art club in my school and following my favorite artists on Instagram to learn.

✓ Oh yes, of course, I always want to learn more about art because it helps me relax and improve my creativity, and I learn about art by participating in my art club at my school and following my favorite artists on Instagram.

The verb 'helped' should be in present tense 'helps' to match 'always want'. Also, 'while I will learn' is awkward; 'and I learn' is better to express ongoing action. 'In my school' should be 'at my school' for correct preposition.