Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'drying' thay vì 'drawing', và 'every single days' nên là 'every single day'. Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và sử dụng từ đúng ngữ cảnh để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, absolutely. I am a big fan of drawing nowadays. I have spent a lot of money on buying drawing tools like brushes and color palettes to practice every single day.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ nối không phù hợp như 'and now today' và chú ý đến thì động từ. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng các từ nối phù hợp để liên kết ý.

例: Yes, of course. However, I have to spend a lot of time studying at the moment, so I think in the near future I will try to visit some galleries in my local area because they are quite easy to access.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động và thuyết phục hơn.

例: Oh yes, of course. I want to learn more about art by following my favorite artists on Instagram and watching tutorials on social media. Moreover, I plan to join the art club at my school to practice regularly and improve my skills.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'had participated' nên là 'participated'. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu trả lời và tránh để câu bị dang dở để thể hiện sự tự tin và rõ ràng.

例: Yes, of course. When I was a kid, I participated in an art club at my school where I learned how to draw and mix colors. Moreover, I also practiced drawing at home by copying pictures from books.

× I am a big fan of drying nowadays.

✓ I am a big fan of drawing nowadays.

The word 'drying' is incorrect here; the correct present participle form related to art is 'drawing'. This is a vocabulary error involving the use of the correct verb form.

× I had spent a lot of money on buying drawing tools like brushes or color palette to practice every single days.

✓ I have spent a lot of money on buying drawing tools like brushes or color palettes to practice every single day.

The past perfect tense 'had spent' is incorrect here because the action is recent and relevant to the present, so present perfect 'have spent' is appropriate. Also, 'color palette' should be plural 'color palettes' to match 'brushes', and 'every single days' should be 'every single day' because 'every' requires singular noun.

× However, and now today I had to spend a lot of time on studying, so I think in the nearly future I will try to visit some galleries in my local areas because it's quite easy and approachable.

✓ However, today I have to spend a lot of time studying, so I think in the near future I will try to visit some galleries in my local area because it's quite easy and approachable.

The conjunction 'and' is unnecessary after 'However'. 'Had to' is past tense but the context suggests present, so 'have to' is better. 'On studying' should be 'studying' without 'on'. 'Nearly future' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'near future'. 'Local areas' should be singular 'local area' to refer to the general vicinity.

× I want to learn more about art through social media or following some favorite artists on Instagram.

✓ I want to learn more about art through social media or by following some favorite artists on Instagram.

The phrase 'through social media or following' lacks parallel structure. Adding 'by' before 'following' corrects the prepositional phrase and improves clarity.

× Moreover, I also want to become a member of art club in my school to improve my art skills.

✓ Moreover, I also want to become a member of an art club in my school to improve my art skills.

The phrase 'art club' requires an article. Since it is not a specific club previously mentioned, the indefinite article 'an' is appropriate.

× When I was a kid, I had participated in an art club in my school to learn about how to draw and how to mix a colours.

✓ When I was a kid, I participated in an art club in my school to learn how to draw and how to mix colours.

The past perfect 'had participated' is unnecessary here; simple past 'participated' is correct. 'About how to draw' is better as 'how to draw'. 'A colours' is incorrect; 'colours' is plural and does not need 'a'.