Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ, tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài.

例: Yes, I quite like drawing. When I was young, I learned how to draw and sketch with a pencil. I often go outside to paint landscapes because I enjoy capturing nature.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về sở thích của bạn khi đến phòng tranh.

例: I like going to art galleries, but I don't visit them often because I am busy. However, when I do, I enjoy looking at paintings and sculptures, especially those that feature nature themes.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách sử dụng thì trong câu. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it is my favorite hobby. I find that creating art helps me relax and unwind. Sometimes, I like to capture beautiful views and scenery in my drawings, which makes me happy.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn học vẽ khi còn nhỏ.

例: Yes, I enjoyed learning to draw when I was a kid. Since I couldn't afford art classes, I bought many books about drawing and practiced on my own at home.

× When I was young I learned about drawing and bending by pencil at that time.

✓ When I was young, I learned about drawing and blending with a pencil at that time.

The word 'bending' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'blending' which relates to drawing techniques. Also, a comma is needed after 'young' for correct sentence structure.

× I always go out to paint.

✓ I always go out to paint.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I like to go to the gallery, but I go to there not often because I don't have time.

✓ I like to go to the gallery, but I don't go there often because I don't have time.

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect; 'go there' is the correct form. Also, 'not often' should be placed after the auxiliary verb 'do' for proper negation.

× Besides, I just want to go to enjoy some product and art belong to some sky which I like like.

✓ Besides, I just want to go to enjoy some products and art belonging to some style which I like.

The phrase 'go to enjoy' is awkward; 'go to enjoy' is acceptable but better phrased as 'go to enjoy'. 'Product' should be plural 'products' to match the context. 'Belong to some sky' is incorrect; it should be 'belonging to some style'. The repeated 'like like' is a mistake; only one 'like' is needed.

× Yes, I wish I can learn more about art.

✓ Yes, I wish I could learn more about art.

After 'wish', the modal verb 'could' is used to express a desire contrary to reality, not 'can'.

× I think art is my favorite and it is the way to relax and unwind.

✓ I think art is my favorite, and it is a way to relax and unwind.

'My favorite' should be followed by a noun; here, 'a way' is more appropriate than 'the way' unless specifying a unique method.

× Sometime I capturing the view and scenery, it makes me feel happy.

✓ Sometimes I capture the view and scenery; it makes me feel happy.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'I capturing' is incorrect; it should be 'I capture'. The sentence is a run-on and should be separated properly.

× Yes, I quite like to learn drawing when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I quite liked learning drawing when I was a kid.

'Quite like to learn' is awkward; 'quite liked learning' is more natural. Also, 'drawing' as a gerund fits better here.

× When I was a kid, I didn't have money to join arts classes, so I bought so many books about this kind of art.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't have money to join art classes, so I bought many books about this kind of art.

'Arts classes' should be 'art classes'. 'So many' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate here.