Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用更准确的句型表达自己的观点，并避免重复和冗余。可以先直接回答喜欢与否，然后简要说明原因，保持句子简洁流畅。

例: No, I don't like drawing because I'm not good at it and it makes me feel stressed. Therefore, I usually avoid this activity.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在语法和用词错误。建议先明确表达喜欢与否，再用连词连接原因，使用更准确的词汇描述感受，避免重复。

例: No, I don't enjoy going to galleries because I find the artworks hard to understand. Instead, I prefer spending time in natural scenery, which I find more relaxing.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和重复词汇。建议使用更准确的表达方式，避免重复，并用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I am very interested in photography. Improving my artistic sense can definitely help enhance my photography skills.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不准确的问题。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，清晰描述学习内容，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was in primary and junior high school. We had classes where we practiced using colors and arranging pictures properly.

× No, I'm not wrong.

✓ No, I don't.

这里学生想表达否定喜欢画画的意思，应该用否定助动词'don't'，而不是'I'm not wrong'，后者意思是“我没错”，不符合语境。

× I'm not very like drawing because I'm I'm familiar and very poor at this activity.

✓ I don't really like drawing because I'm not familiar with it and I'm very poor at this activity.

'I'm not very like drawing'结构错误，应该用'I don't like'表达喜欢与否；'I'm familiar'应为'I'm not familiar'表示不熟悉。

× So drawing for me is kind of stress and it's no good for my mood.

✓ So drawing for me is kind of stressful and it's not good for my mood.

'stress'是名词，形容词应为'stressful'；'it's no good'应改为'it's not good'更符合表达习惯。

× No, never much I I prefer the natural sceneries.

✓ No, not really. I prefer natural scenery.

'never much'用法错误，应该用'not really'表达否定；'sceneries'通常不可数，使用'scenery'。

× As for galleries, I think they are a little bit hard to understand and for me it's a it's a terrace and boring stuff to do.

✓ As for galleries, I think they are a little bit hard to understand and for me it's a bit tedious and boring to do.

'terrace'用词错误，应该用'tedious'表示乏味；'stuff to do'不合适，改为'boring to do'更自然。

× Yes, I want to learn something about Ave. 'cause now I'm very keen on photography.

✓ Yes, I want to learn something about art because now I'm very keen on photography.

'Ave'应为'art'，拼写错误；'cause'口语中可用，但书面语中应用'because'。

× So I think improving the sense of art can can help can be helpful to my photographic skills.

✓ So I think improving the sense of art can help improve my photographic skills.

重复使用'can'错误，应简化为'can help'；'can be helpful to'结构冗余，改为'help improve'更简洁。

× Yes, when I was in my primary school and junior high school, we had some other classes concluding the drawing and making.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school and junior high school, we had some other classes including drawing and making.

'concluding'用错，应为'including'表示“包括”；'my primary school'前不需要冠词。

× So we learn some drawing skills about how to use in the color and how to arrange our picture.

✓ So we learned some drawing skills about how to use color and how to arrange our pictures.

'use in the color'中'in'多余，应直接用'use color'；'picture'应为复数形式'pictures'；时态应与上下文一致用过去时'learned'。