Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有點重複且語法不太正確。建議你直接表達不喜歡畫畫的原因，並用一兩句話說明原因，避免冗長且不清楚的句子。

例: No, I don't like drawing because I'm not very good at it and it doesn't make me feel successful.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤和用詞不當，建議使用正確的動詞和名詞，並用連接詞使句子更流暢。

例: Yes, I like going to galleries because I appreciate the artwork. Therefore, I often invite my friends to visit galleries together.

提案: 回答中語法和用詞不夠自然，建議用更簡潔且正確的句子表達現在不想學習藝術，但將來可能會。

例: Actually, I don't want to learn more about art now because I need to focus on my job. However, I might study it when I am older.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤且句子不完整，建議直接說明從小學到高中都有上美術課，並用連接詞使句子完整。

例: Yes, I learned drawing since I was a kid because we had art classes from elementary school until high school.

× No, I don't like drawing. I'm not very good at this subject, so enough made me feel successful. So I don't like drawing.

✓ No, I don't like drawing. I'm not very good at this subject, so it doesn't make me feel successful. Therefore, I don't like drawing.

The phrase 'enough made me feel successful' is unclear and incorrect in sentence structure. The correct expression should be 'it doesn't make me feel successful' to convey the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.

× For this one, I like to go to the gallery because I appreciate, uh, the drawing other draw.

✓ For this one, I like to go to the gallery because I appreciate the drawings others draw.

The phrase 'the drawing other draw' is incorrect. 'Drawing' should be plural 'drawings' to match the plural subject 'others'. Also, 'other' should be 'others' to refer to other people. This corrects the prepositional and plural usage.

× So I always invite my friend go to jewelry together.

✓ So I always invite my friend to go to the gallery together.

The phrase 'invite my friend go' is missing the preposition 'to' before the verb 'go'. Also, 'jewelry' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'gallery' to match the previous context. This corrects the pronoun and prepositional usage.

× In fact not because I am 23 years old and I now need to use all for my job.

✓ In fact, no, because I am 23 years old and I now need to use everything for my job.

The phrase 'In fact not' is missing a comma and the word 'no' to be grammatically correct. 'Use all' is awkward; 'use everything' is more natural. This corrects the present tense and article usage.

× So in this time I don't want to learn more about art, but when I be old I would.

✓ So at this time, I don't want to learn more about art, but when I am old, I would.

The phrase 'when I be old' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am old' to use the correct present tense form of the verb 'to be'. Also, 'in this time' should be 'at this time' for correct preposition usage.

× Absolutely yes, because when we were elementary student, we need to join the art class until high school.

✓ Absolutely yes, because when we were elementary students, we needed to join art class until high school.

'Elementary student' should be plural 'elementary students' to match 'we'. 'Need' should be past tense 'needed' to match the past time frame. 'The art class' can be 'art class' without 'the' for general reference.

× So wherever he I learned.

✓ So wherever I was, I learned.

The phrase 'wherever he I learned' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be 'wherever I was, I learned' to make a correct and meaningful sentence.