Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で、文法的な誤りや意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「AT Crescent」が何か不明瞭で、説明が不足しています。また、冗長な表現や繰り返しが見られます。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、具体的な経験や感情を詳しく述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I enjoy drawing, although I'm not very skilled at it. When I was in high school, I joined an art club, but I found it challenging and was hesitant to participate fully.

提案: 文法的な誤りがあり、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。例えば、「that time is during some masterpieces」という表現は不自然です。回答は一文で終わらず、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。また、具体的な理由や感情を詳しく述べることが望ましいです。

例: Yes, I like visiting national galleries in central Tokyo because seeing masterpieces inspires me and helps me relax.

提案: 「I like standing a lot about the history of art」という表現は不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。正しい動詞や表現を使い、文を明確にしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文を繋げ、内容を具体的に説明すると良いです。

例: Yes, I am very interested in the history of art because I also enjoy classical music. I want to learn more about how art and classical music are related.

提案: 回答が断片的で、繰り返しや不自然な表現が多いです。文法的にも改善が必要です。より流暢で自然な英語を使い、具体的な経験や感情を一貫して述べることが重要です。

例: Yes, when I was a child, my mother took me to painting classes during summer vacation. However, I found it difficult and didn't enjoy painting much.

× When I was in high school student I participated in the AT Crescent, but I couldn't do that way, so I was reluctant to attend there.

✓ When I was a high school student, I participated in the AT Crescent, but I couldn't do it that way, so I was reluctant to attend there.

The phrase 'high school student' requires an article 'a' to indicate a singular countable noun. Also, 'do that way' is incorrect; it should be 'do it that way' to refer properly to the manner of doing something.

× I want to go to the national galleries which are located on the central Tokyo and that time is during some masterpieces.

✓ I want to go to the national galleries which are located in central Tokyo, and at that time, there are some masterpieces on display.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect for locations like cities or areas; 'in' is appropriate. Also, 'that time is during some masterpieces' is unclear and incorrect; it should specify that masterpieces are on display at that time.

× Makes me motivated and relaxing.

✓ They make me feel motivated and relaxed.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Makes' needs a subject, and 'relaxing' should be changed to 'relaxed' to describe the feeling.

× I like standing a lot about the history of art because I am interested in the history of classical music.

✓ I like studying a lot about the history of art because I am interested in the history of classical music.

The verb 'standing' is incorrect here; the intended verb is likely 'studying'. This is a vocabulary error related to verb choice rather than preposition, but it affects sentence meaning.

× I want to learn more about a relation between the arts and classical music.

✓ I want to learn more about the relation between the arts and classical music.

The phrase 'a relation' should be 'the relation' because it refers to a specific relationship already known or implied.

× Yes, and when I was a child, my mother took me to the painting class in the summer vacation, but I couldn't draw.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my mother took me to painting classes during the summer vacation, but I couldn't draw.

'Painting class' should be plural 'painting classes' to indicate repeated or general activity. Also, 'in the summer vacation' is better expressed as 'during the summer vacation'.

× Really. Really. So I I don't like painting even.

✓ Really, I don't even like painting.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Combining into a single sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.