Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'dying' ควรเป็น 'drawing' และ 'creativity' ควรเป็น 'my creativity' นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น 'Wow' และใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและสั้นกระชับมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I enjoy drawing quite a lot because it allows me to explore my creativity and feel relaxed after a busy day. For example, I often sketch landscapes or pottery, which helps me improve my art skills.

提案: คำตอบมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'going to gallery' ควรเป็น 'going to galleries' และ 'Galilee' น่าจะเป็น 'galleries' นอกจากนี้ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because they offer a peaceful environment where I can appreciate art and culture. For example, visiting galleries allows me to explore different styles of painting and learn about virtual art, which helps me relax and gain new knowledge.

提案: คำตอบมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'it's allowed me' ควรเป็น 'it allows me' และ 'THC' น่าจะเป็นคำผิด นอกจากนี้ควรใช้ linking words และคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเพื่อให้ความหมายชัดเจน

例: Yes, definitely I want to learn more about art because it allows me to explore my thoughts and understand different cultures better. For example, studying virtual art forms like painting or landscapes can deepen my appreciation of history.

提案: คำตอบมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'ski activity' และ 'mortal skill' ซึ่งไม่เหมาะสม ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจน นอกจากนี้ควรแบ่งประโยคให้เหมาะสมและใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหล

例: Yes, I did learn drawing when I was a kid. I took some basic art classes at school, which helped me develop my skills and find creative abilities. It was a fun way for me to expand my imagination and relax after studying.

× Yes, I enjoy dying quite a lot.

✓ Yes, I enjoy drawing quite a lot.

The word 'dying' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'drawing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but since it affects the verb form, it is corrected to the gerund 'drawing' to match the verb 'enjoy'.

× It allows me to explore and creativity and feel relaxed after a busy day.

✓ It allows me to explore creativity and feel relaxed after a busy day.

The phrase 'explore and creativity' is incorrect because 'creativity' is a noun and should not be preceded by 'and' without a verb. The correct phrase is 'explore creativity'.

× For example, I often sketch landscape or pottery which help me improve my art skill.

✓ For example, I often sketch landscapes or pottery which help me improve my art skills.

'Landscape' and 'skill' should be pluralized to 'landscapes' and 'skills' because the sentence refers to multiple instances or types. Also, 'pottery' is uncountable and can remain as is.

× Yes, I enjoy going to gallery because they offer a peaceful environment and to appreciate art and culture.

✓ Yes, I enjoy going to the gallery because it offers a peaceful environment and allows me to appreciate art and culture.

The noun 'gallery' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'they' should be 'it' to agree with the singular noun 'gallery'. The phrase 'and to appreciate' is corrected to 'and allows me to appreciate' for grammatical correctness.

× For example, visiting Galilee allow me to explore different style of painting and learn about virtual art, which I can both relax and keep.

✓ For example, visiting galleries allows me to explore different styles of painting and learn about virtual art, which helps me both relax and keep interested.

'Galilee' seems to be a typo for 'galleries'. 'Allow' should be 'allows' to agree with singular subject 'visiting galleries'. 'Style' should be plural 'styles'. The phrase 'which I can both relax and keep' is unclear and corrected to 'which helps me both relax and keep interested' for clarity.

× Yes definitely I want to learn more about art because it's allowed me to explore my THC and understand different culture better.

✓ Yes, definitely I want to learn more about art because it allows me to explore my thoughts and understand different cultures better.

'It's allowed' is incorrect; the present tense 'it allows' fits better here. 'THC' seems to be a typo for 'thoughts'. 'Culture' should be plural 'cultures' to match 'different'.

× For example, study virtual art form like painting or landscape can deep my appreciate from history.

✓ For example, studying virtual art forms like painting or landscapes can deepen my appreciation of history.

The verb 'study' should be in gerund form 'studying' to act as the subject. 'Art form' should be plural 'art forms'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. 'Deep' should be 'deepen' as a verb. 'Appreciate' should be the noun 'appreciation'. 'From history' is corrected to 'of history'.

× Yes, I did learn when I was a kid I took some basic art class at school which helped me to develop my ski activity and find mortal skill.

✓ Yes, I did learn when I was a kid. I took some basic art classes at school which helped me to develop my skills and find more skills.

'Art class' should be plural 'art classes' to indicate multiple classes. 'Ski activity' and 'mortal skill' seem to be typos or incorrect phrases; corrected to 'skills' and 'more skills' for clarity.

× It was fun way to me to expand my imagination and relax after study.

✓ It was a fun way for me to expand my imagination and relax after studying.

The phrase 'fun way to me' is incorrect; it should be 'a fun way for me'. 'After study' should be 'after studying' to use the gerund form after a preposition.