Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and unclear. Try to keep your sentences clear and concise, and avoid mixing tenses. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, you can say what you like to draw and give a specific example with proper tense.

例: Yes, I really love drawing. Whenever I have free time, I like to draw different things. For example, yesterday I drew three cartoons, including Tom and Jerry and Kuromi. My student really liked my drawings and praised me.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and a bit confusing. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I really hope to visit an art gallery someday because I have never been to one. I want to see the artworks and learn more about different styles. I am very excited about this opportunity.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer smoother. Also, explain your opinion with a reason.

例: No, I don't want to learn more about art because I am not very interested in it. For me, art is just a hobby, so I don't enjoy studying it deeply.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and is unclear. Use correct past tense and complete sentences. Also, organize your answer logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I learned drawing, but not when I was a kid. I started learning drawing when I was in class 8 or 9. I practiced for about two or three months, and it was very basic.

× I like to draw different kind of things about Yesterday I draw three cartoons

✓ I like to draw different kinds of things. Yesterday I drew three cartoons

The phrase 'different kind of things' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of things' because 'different' implies multiple types. Also, 'draw' in past tense should be 'drew' to match the past time reference 'Yesterday'.

× Yesterday I draw three cartoons

✓ Yesterday I drew three cartoons

The verb 'draw' should be in past tense 'drew' because the action happened in the past, indicated by 'Yesterday'.

× one is Tom and Jerry and one is Kuromi and my student really like the drawing

✓ One is Tom and Jerry and one is Kuromi, and my student really likes the drawing

The subject 'my student' is singular, so the verb should be 'likes' to agree in number. Also, a comma is added before 'and' for clarity.

× she said that I.

✓ She said that I did well.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object after 'I'. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× I am really hoping that someday I will go to the gallery

✓ I really hope that someday I will go to the gallery

Using 'I really hope' is more natural than 'I am really hoping' in this context. 'Hope' is a stative verb and usually not used in continuous form.

× I haven't gone there yet, but I really wanted to go there

✓ I haven't gone there yet, but I really want to go there

The phrase 'I really wanted' is past tense, but the context suggests present desire, so 'I really want' is correct.

× and so see what are the things, what are the odds

✓ and see what things are there, what the odds are

The sentence structure is awkward; reordering words improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I'm really excited too, so see the.

✓ I'm really excited too to see them.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'see'. Adding 'to see them' completes the thought.

× No, I really don't want to learn more about it because I'm really not interested.

✓ No, I really don't want to learn more about it because I'm not interested.

The phrase 'I'm really not interested' is acceptable, but removing 'really' makes it more natural and concise.

× Yes, I learn.

✓ Yes, I learned.

The question is about past learning, so the verb should be in past tense 'learned'.

× Drawing bird? Not when I am there a kid.

✓ Drawing birds? Not when I was a kid.

The sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect tense and pronouns. 'Was' is past tense for 'am', and 'there' is unnecessary.

× I learned drawing when I am in class 8 or 9 I guess.

✓ I learned drawing when I was in class 8 or 9, I guess.

The verb 'am' should be past tense 'was' to match the past time frame.

× And I. Learn it for like two or three months, which is. So basic.

✓ And I learned it for like two or three months, which was very basic.

The verb 'Learn' should be past tense 'learned' to match the past time frame. Also, 'which is so basic' should be 'which was very basic' for clarity and correctness.