Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy teamwork, especially at my workplace. Playing baseball during my school years taught me the value of working together to achieve common goals.

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve your response.

例: Yes, I have teamed up with a colleague named Miss Manner, who is an expert in agriculture. Her extensive knowledge has helped me better understand climate change.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details using correct grammar and linking words.

例: I have learned that expressing my feelings clearly is essential, especially when working with foreign team members. This openness helps improve my skills and teamwork.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to directly state what you dislike about teamwork, provide specific examples, and use correct grammar and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I dislike situations where some team members act as if they are more important than others. When I was in Japan, I struggled with this issue and advised my boss about it.

× Yes, I like a teamwork, especially in my workplace because until I grow up as a adult, I played baseball in the junior high school and high school and at that time I understand that teamwork is a precious and I.

✓ Yes, I like teamwork, especially in my workplace because until I grew up as an adult, I played baseball in junior high school and high school and at that time I understood that teamwork is precious.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'teamwork' which is an uncountable noun, so it should be omitted. 'Grow' should be in past tense 'grew' to match the past context. 'A adult' should be 'an adult' because 'adult' starts with a vowel sound. 'The junior high school' should be 'junior high school' without 'the' as it refers to school in general. 'Understand' should be past tense 'understood' to match the past time frame. 'Is a precious' is incorrect; 'precious' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. The sentence is corrected accordingly.

× Yes, in my workplace I worked with Miss Manner who is the specialist about. Agriculture and hard knowledge always help me to understand about climate change.

✓ Yes, in my workplace I worked with Miss Manner who is a specialist in agriculture and her knowledge always helps me to understand climate change.

'The specialist about' is incorrect; it should be 'a specialist in' to correctly express expertise. 'Agriculture' should not be capitalised. 'Hard knowledge' is likely a mistake for 'her knowledge'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'knowledge'. 'Understand about' is incorrect; 'understand' does not require 'about' after it. The sentence is corrected to reflect these changes.

× I learned that expressing my feeling their straight is very essential especially in teamwork with foreign members and are such a fearing guys important to improve my skill.

✓ I learned that expressing my feelings directly is very essential, especially in teamwork with foreign members, and such caring guys are important to improve my skills.

'Feeling their straight' is incorrect; it should be 'feelings directly' to convey the intended meaning. 'Are such a fearing guys' is incorrect; likely intended 'such caring guys'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to match context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't like the situation where people who are very so important either in the team and when I was in Japan I was a struggle with such situation and helped my boss about advice.

✓ I don't like situations where people think they are very important in the team. When I was in Japan, I struggled with such situations and helped my boss by giving advice.

The original sentence is confusing and structurally incorrect. 'People who are very so important either in the team' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'people think they are very important in the team'. 'I was a struggle' is incorrect; should be 'I struggled'. 'Helped my boss about advice' is incorrect; corrected to 'helped my boss by giving advice'. The sentence is split for clarity and grammatical accuracy.