Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 문장 구조가 명확하지 않습니다. 예를 들어, 'They're saying to teamwork very much'는 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 또한, 연결어 사용이 부족하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름이 약합니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 적절한 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I like teamwork because it allows people to combine their strengths and ideas to achieve a common goal. For example, when working on group projects at school, collaborating with others often leads to better results than working alone. Additionally, teamwork helps improve communication skills and builds a sense of unity.

提案: 답변이 전반적으로 이해 가능하지만, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'allows them also to combine different skill and ideas'는 주어와 목적어가 일치하지 않고, 단수 복수 형태가 맞지 않습니다. 또한, 연결어 사용이 더 자연스러워야 합니다. 문법을 정확히 하고, 문장 간 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 답변을 개선하세요.

例: Yes, I have teamed up with others on several occasions, especially during group projects at school and work. Collaborating with teammates allows us to combine different skills and ideas, which often leads to better results. For example, in a recent project, working together helped us complete the task more efficiently.

提案: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 예를 들어, 'listening to other side here'와 'teamwork poster sense of responsibility'는 부자연스럽고 의미가 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 재구성하고, 적절한 어휘를 사용하여 답변을 개선해야 합니다.

例: Working in a team teaches valuable skills such as communication, cooperation, and problem-solving. It helps me understand the importance of listening to others and working towards a common goal. Additionally, teamwork fosters a sense of responsibility and improves my ability to manage tasks effectively.

提案: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'This often lead'는 주어-동사 일치 오류이며, 'certain teams members'는 복수형 표현이 부적절합니다. 문법을 정확히 하고, 문장 구조를 다듬어 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: One aspect I dislike about teamwork is when communication breaks down among members. This often leads to misunderstandings and delays in completing tasks. Additionally, sometimes certain team members may not contribute equally, which can cause frustration and affect the overall productivity of the group.

× They're saying to teamwork very much because it allows people to combine their strengths and ideas to achieve our common goal.

✓ I like teamwork very much because it allows people to combine their strengths and ideas to achieve our common goal.

The pronoun 'They're' is incorrect here; it should be 'I' to refer to the speaker's own opinion. Also, 'saying to teamwork' is incorrect usage; the correct expression is 'like teamwork'.

× For example, when working on group, project and school, collaborating with the others often needed to better result than working alone.

✓ For example, when working on group projects and school assignments, collaborating with others is often needed to achieve better results than working alone.

The phrase 'working on group, project and school' is incorrect; it should be 'working on group projects and school assignments'. Also, 'collaborating with the others often needed' lacks a verb and correct article usage; it should be 'collaborating with others is often needed'.

× Additionally, teamwork helps improve communication skill and build a sense of power.

✓ Additionally, teamwork helps improve communication skills and build a sense of empowerment.

'Communication skill' should be plural 'communication skills' because it refers to multiple abilities. 'Build a sense of power' is awkward; 'build a sense of empowerment' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I have teamed up with others on several occasions, especially during group projects at school and work.

✓ Yes, I have teamed up with others on several occasions, especially during group projects at school and at work.

Adding 'at' before 'work' clarifies the location and maintains parallel structure.

× Collaborating with teammates allows them also to combine different skill and ideas, which often lead to better result.

✓ Collaborating with teammates also allows us to combine different skills and ideas, which often lead to better results.

'Allows them also' is incorrect because the speaker is part of the team; 'allows us also' or 'also allows us' is correct. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills', and 'result' should be plural 'results'.

× For example, in the recent project, working together helped us complete the task more efficiently.

✓ For example, in a recent project, working together helped us complete the task more efficiently.

'The recent project' implies a specific project known to both speaker and listener; 'a recent project' is more appropriate here.

× It helps me understand the importance of listening to other side here and working toward the community common goal.

✓ It helps me understand the importance of listening to the other side here and working toward the community's common goal.

'Other side here' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Community common goal' requires a possessive form 'community's common goal'.

× Additionally, teamwork poster sense of responsibility and improve my ability to manage completely effectively.

✓ Additionally, teamwork fosters a sense of responsibility and improves my ability to manage completely and effectively.

'Poster' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'fosters'. 'Improve' should be 'improves' to agree with singular subject 'teamwork'. 'Completely effectively' needs to be separated by 'and' for clarity.

× This often lead to misunderstandings and delays in completing tasks.

✓ This often leads to misunderstandings and delays in completing tasks.

The subject 'This' is singular, so the verb should be 'leads' instead of 'lead'.

× Additionally, sometimes certain teams members may not contribute equally, which can cause frustration and affect overall productivity of the group.

✓ Additionally, sometimes certain team members may not contribute equally, which can cause frustration and affect the overall productivity of the group.

'Teams members' should be 'team members' (singular possessive). Also, 'overall productivity' needs the definite article 'the' before it.