Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and provides some details, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'I like teamwork' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy teamwork because it plays a crucial role in my career as a sales manager. Working with others has helped me improve my coordination, communication, and listening skills, which are essential for success.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and somewhat unclear. Try to complete your sentences and avoid repetition like 'many, many'. Use linking words to explain the situation clearly and logically. Provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I have worked with many subordinates and colleagues on recent projects. For example, in the last three months, our company launched two new products, and the sales, product, and tech teams collaborated closely to achieve the objectives.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how effective listening helps in teamwork. Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow.

例: From working in a team, I have learned the importance of effective listening. Since team members often have different viewpoints and express ideas differently, listening carefully helps us understand each other and work together efficiently.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to explain the cause and effect. Be concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Although teamwork has many benefits, I dislike that differing viewpoints can sometimes cause disagreements. This often makes it difficult for the sales, product, and tech teams to agree quickly, which may delay project completion or product launches.

× this is one of the important part of my career

✓ this is one of the important parts of my career

The phrase 'one of the important part' is incorrect because 'one of the' should be followed by a plural noun. Here, 'part' should be pluralized to 'parts' to match the phrase structure.

× I'm doing teamwork is a first and foremost activity that has been assigned to me

✓ Doing teamwork is the first and foremost activity that has been assigned to me

The original sentence has a structural error by combining 'I'm doing teamwork' and 'is' incorrectly. The corrected sentence properly uses 'Doing teamwork' as the subject and adds the definite article 'the' before 'first and foremost activity' for clarity.

× there has been two to three different projects and new products that our company has launched

✓ there have been two to three different projects and new products that our company has launched

The phrase 'there has been' is incorrect when referring to multiple projects. Since 'two to three different projects' is plural, the correct form is 'there have been' to agree in number.

× there were three teams that need to work together

✓ there were three teams that needed to work together

The verb 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to agree with the past tense 'were' in the sentence, maintaining tense consistency.

× The most important learning of this team was was effective listening

✓ The most important learning of this team was effective listening

The repetition of 'was' is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate 'was' corrects the sentence.

× they do used to differ in their viewpoints

✓ they do differ in their viewpoints

The phrase 'do used to' is incorrect. 'Used to' indicates past habitual action and does not combine with 'do'. The correct phrase is 'do differ' to express present habitual action.

× it is on us that how we will listen

✓ it depends on us how we will listen

The phrase 'it is on us that how we will listen' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'it depends on us how we will listen' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× there are certain aspects of which which creates hurdles

✓ there are certain aspects which create hurdles

The subject 'aspects' is plural, so the verb should be 'create' instead of 'creates' to agree in number.

× it's many a time becomes hurdle for all the three teams to come up and agree to a single point

✓ many a time, it becomes a hurdle for all the three teams to come up and agree on a single point

The phrase 'it's many a time becomes hurdle' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'many a time, it becomes a hurdle'. Also, 'agree to a single point' should be 'agree on a single point' for correct preposition usage.