Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure your sentences are complete. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy working in a team because it allows people to combine their strengths and ideas to achieve a common goal.

提案: Good answer, but improve subject-verb agreement and add linking words for coherence. Also, try to provide a specific example to enrich your response.

例: Yes, I have teamed up with others on several occasions, especially during group projects at school. For example, last semester, we worked together to complete a science project, which led to better results because we combined our ideas effectively.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure. Avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be specific about the skills you learn and how they help you.

例: Working in a team teaches valuable skills such as communication, cooperation, and problem-solving. Moreover, it helps me understand the importance of listening to others' ideas and working together towards a common goal.

提案: Avoid sentence fragments and improve fluency by connecting your ideas with linking words. Also, try to explain why conflicts can slow down progress for a more detailed answer.

例: One thing I dislike about teamwork is that sometimes conflicts or disagreements arise between teammates, which can cause distractions and slow down the progress of the project because it affects our focus and cooperation.

× Yes, I enjoyed being working very much because it allows people to combine their strength and ideas.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed working very much because it allows people to combine their strengths and ideas.

The phrase 'being working' is incorrect; only the gerund form 'working' is needed after 'enjoyed'. Also, 'strength' should be plural 'strengths' because it refers to multiple people's abilities.

× To achieve a common goal.

✓ It helps to achieve a common goal.

The sentence fragment 'To achieve a common goal.' lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'It helps' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Collaborating with others allow us to unite our ideas, which often leads to better results.

✓ Collaborating with others allows us to unite our ideas, which often leads to better results.

The subject 'Collaborating with others' is singular, so the verb should be 'allows' instead of 'allow' to agree in number.

× Working in the team teaches valuable skills such as communication, corporation and problem solving.

✓ Working in a team teaches valuable skills such as communication, cooperation, and problem solving.

The phrase 'in the team' should be 'in a team' to indicate any team generally. Also, 'corporation' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'cooperation'.

× It helps me understand the importance of listening to others. Ideas and. Working towards a common goal.

✓ It helps me understand the importance of listening to others' ideas and working towards a common goal.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combining them into one sentence with proper possessive form 'others' ideas' and correct structure improves clarity.

× One thing I dislike about the teamwork is that sometimes conflicts or disagreements arise between teammates, which can cause distractions and can. Slow down the progress of the project.

✓ One thing I dislike about teamwork is that sometimes conflicts or disagreements arise between teammates, which can cause distractions and slow down the progress of the project.

The definite article 'the' before 'teamwork' is unnecessary because 'teamwork' is an uncountable noun used in general sense. Also, the sentence had an unnecessary period splitting it, which was corrected.