Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and adjectives, remove filler words, and use linking words for clarity. Add one specific example of what the teacher did. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My favourite high-school teacher was my chemistry teacher because she was energetic and passionate. She explained difficult topics slowly and used hands-on experiments so everyone understood, which inspired me to study harder and enjoy the subject.

提案: Use correct tense and verb forms, avoid repetition, and complete the thought. Begin with a direct answer, give a clear reason, and finish with a reflective comment. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

例: No, I'm not. I lost contact with my primary school teacher because I moved away from my hometown many years ago, and we haven't kept in touch. However, I often think fondly of her and the lessons she taught me.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence, correct prepositions and plural forms, and give one specific example of help provided. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance' to add clarity. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: She helped me by giving individual attention and encouraging questions. For example, she stayed after class to explain difficult problems and provided extra practice materials, which improved my confidence and grades.

提案: Be concise and use correct modal verbs. Start with a clear statement of intention, give a specific reason, and end with a realistic condition or plan. Remove fillers like 'umm' and avoid repetition. Use 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to become a teacher because I admire how my teacher supported and motivated me. If I have the opportunity, I plan to study education and gain classroom experience so I can help students the same way.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher in high school she was very energetic and passion.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher in high school; she was very energetic and passionate.

The sentence mixes present and past context: 'in high school' refers to the past, so use past tense 'had'. 'Passion' is a noun but the sentence needs an adjective modifying 'she' — use 'passionate'. Also two independent clauses require proper punctuation; use a semicolon or separate into two sentences. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, replace 'passion' with 'passionate', and separate clauses with a semicolon or period.

× She always is blame difficult umm topics Dolly until everyone understood, which inspired me to study harder and enjoy the subject.

✓ She always blamed difficult topics clearly until everyone understood, which inspired me to study harder and enjoy the subject.

Word order and verb form are incorrect. 'Always is blame' is ungrammatical — the correct past form is 'always blamed' if referring to habitual past actions. 'Dolly' appears to be a mistaken word; likely intended 'clearly' or 'diligently'. 'Understood' fits past tense. Use 'blamed' -> 'explained' or 'clarified' is better. Suggestions: choose the correct verb ('explained'/'clarified'), use past tense 'always explained', and place adverb ('clearly'/'diligently') after the verb or before it as appropriate.

× She always is blame difficult umm topics Dolly until everyone understood, which inspired me to study harder and enjoy the subject.

✓ She always blamed difficult topics clearly until everyone understood, which inspired me to study harder and enjoy the subject.

The auxiliary and main verb combination 'is blame' is incorrect for third person singular past/habitual actions. For past habitual actions use 'blamed' or better 'explained/clarified'. If present habitual, use 'always blames' (third person singular present). Suggestions: use 'always explained' for clarity, or 'always explained... until everyone understood' to match past context.

× Well, I haven't been touch with my primary school teacher because I moved a away from my hometown a long time ago.

✓ Well, I haven't been in touch with my primary school teacher because I moved away from my hometown a long time ago.

The phrase 'been touch' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'been in touch'. The extra article 'a' before 'away' is wrong; use 'moved away'. Suggestions: use the fixed phrase 'been in touch' and remove the extraneous 'a'.

× Well, I haven't been touch with my primary school teacher because I moved a away from my hometown a long time ago.

✓ Well, I haven't been in touch with my primary school teacher because I moved away from my hometown a long time ago.

Present perfect 'I haven't been in touch' is correct to describe up to now, but must use correct collocation 'been in touch'. The reason clause uses past simple 'moved', which is appropriate. Suggestion: keep present perfect for current state and past simple for the past action that caused it.

× So we just lose contact and sometimes I will think about how she.

✓ So we just lost contact, and sometimes I think about her.

Tense mismatch and incomplete clause: 'we just lose contact' should be past simple 'we just lost contact' to describe a past event. 'Sometimes I will think about how she' is incomplete and ungrammatical; likely intended 'I sometimes think about her.' Use 'think about her' not 'how she'. Suggestions: use past simple for the loss of contact and present simple for habitual thoughts: 'we lost contact, and sometimes I think about her.'

× Well, my favorite teacher was a attentive and passionate person who put a lot of effort on understanding student needed.

✓ Well, my favorite teacher was an attentive and passionate person who put a lot of effort into understanding students' needs.

Article 'a attentive' is wrong; before a vowel sound use 'an attentive'. Preposition 'on understanding' should be 'into understanding'. 'Student needed' is ungrammatical: use plural possessive 'students' needs' or 'students' needs'. Suggestions: use 'an attentive', 'into understanding', and plural possessive 'students' needs'.

× Well, my favorite teacher was a attentive and passionate person who put a lot of effort on understanding student needed.

✓ Well, my favorite teacher was an attentive and passionate person who put a lot of effort into understanding students' needs.

The preposition 'on' after 'effort' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'put a lot of effort into'. Also 'student needed' lacks correct form — use 'students' needs'. Suggestions: replace 'on' with 'into' and correct noun phrase to 'students' needs'.

× Yes, I think so and umm, I hope I can become a teacher because I admire how my teacher supported my learning and motivated me to improve.

✓ Yes, I think so. I hope I can become a teacher because I admire how my teacher supported my learning and motivated me to improve.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs punctuation to separate ideas. Modal 'can' is acceptable for ability/possibility. Suggestion: split into two sentences for clarity and maintain 'can become' or use 'could become' when referring to possibility.

× So if I have the opportunity, I wish I can become.

✓ So if I have the opportunity, I wish I could become a teacher.

'I wish I can become' is incorrect after 'wish' when expressing a hypothetical or desire; use 'could' or 'would be able to' (or 'I hope I can become' for realistic possibility). Also the object 'a teacher' is missing. Suggestions: use 'I wish I could become a teacher' for a less realistic wish or 'I hope I can become a teacher' for a realistic hope.