Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and stay on topic. Start with a direct answer about whether you have a favourite teacher, then give one or two clear reasons with specific details. Avoid hesitations and grammatical errors (e.g., subject–verb agreement, word choice). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my high school English teacher because she made lessons engaging and gave detailed feedback on my writing. For example, she showed me how to structure essays and suggested vocabulary to improve my expressions, which helped my grades significantly.

提案: Answer directly and correct factual mistakes. Say 'no' if true, then briefly explain why with clear language and one supporting detail. Avoid irrelevant phrases and repeated words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make your reason coherent.

例: No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher because she retired years ago and moved to another city. As a result, we lost contact and I only see photos of the school online.

提案: Be specific about methods and results. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of how the teacher helped (methods, activities) and the outcomes. Use linking words like 'for example', 'as a result', or 'therefore'. Correct verb tense and plurality (e.g., 'skills', 'teacher taught me').

例: My English teacher helped me by teaching practical study techniques and giving regular feedback. For example, she assigned daily listening exercises and marked my essays with clear comments, and as a result my listening comprehension improved and my writing became more structured.

提案: Give a direct yes/no answer, then explain specific reasons and relevant experience or strengths. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I want to become a teacher', 'I think I have the ability', 'an English teacher'). Use one or two supporting details and a linking phrase like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I would like to become an English teacher because I love the language and enjoy helping others learn. For example, I often tutor classmates in grammar and pronunciation, and this experience has made me confident about teaching in the future.

× I prefer teachers and I want to become a teachers in the future.

✓ I prefer teachers and I want to become a teacher in the future.

The word 'teacher' should be singular after 'become a' because the article 'a' requires a singular noun. Use 'a teacher' instead of 'a teachers'. Suggestion: after 'become' with the indefinite article use a singular noun.

× I want to have someone, uh, such as students or uh, a person who battered a subject and I think I can improve them to a better.

✓ I want to have someone, such as students or a person who is better at a subject, and I think I can help them improve.

Multiple issues: 'battered' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'better at' which is adjective phrase, and 'improve them to a better' is ungrammatical. Use 'is better at a subject' and 'help them improve'. Suggestions: choose correct adjective ('better') and a proper verb phrase ('help them improve').

× No, I don't sleep, uh, keep in touch with primary, primary school teachers and I thinks, umm, their teachers at primary school have many new friends.

✓ No, I don't keep in touch with my primary school teachers, and I think they have many new students.

Several problems: 'sleep' is wrong here and should be removed; 'primary, primary school teachers' repeats word; 'I thinks' uses wrong verb form and pronoun reference is unclear. Use 'my' to show possession and 'I think they have many new students' for clarity. Suggestion: remove extraneous words, use correct verb form 'think' and correct possessive pronoun 'my'.

× Uh, uh, sorry, new students. And I think, uh, they cannot remember myself.

✓ Sorry, new students. And I think they cannot remember me.

Use object pronoun 'me' after the verb 'remember' rather than reflexive 'myself', which is only for emphasis or when subject and object are same. Suggestion: use 'me' as the object of 'remember'.

× I remember correctly when I met English.

✓ I remember clearly when I first learned English.

'Met English' is incorrect collocation; 'met' implies meeting a person. Use 'learned' or 'was introduced to' for subjects. Also 'correctly' is unnatural here; 'clearly' conveys memory. Suggestion: use appropriate verb for learning a subject and adverb 'clearly'.

× My English teachers teach me a lot about writing skill and listening skill.

✓ My English teachers taught me a lot about writing skills and listening skills.

Tense should match past context 'taught'. Also 'writing skill' and 'listening skill' should be plural 'skills' or use 'the skill of writing'. Suggestion: use past tense 'taught' if referring to past instruction and plural 'skills'.

× They taught me the ways to improve that skill and I actually improve.

✓ They taught me ways to improve those skills and I actually improved.

Consistency of tense: 'taught' is past, so the result should be past 'improved' if referring to completed improvement. Also 'that skill' should be plural 'those skills' to match previous mention. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and match number of 'skills'.

× The families I want to become our teachers in the future, uh, specifically English teachers.

✓ In the future I want to become a teacher, specifically an English teacher.

Sentence has many errors: 'The families' is wrong; likely meant 'In the future'. Use singular 'a teacher' and 'an English teacher' with correct article 'an' before vowel sound. Suggestion: reorder sentence to subject-first and use correct articles and singular nouns.

× And now I thinks myself have abilities to, uh, uh, become an English teachers and the main reasons I want to become a English teachers that I really love English.

✓ And now I think I have the ability to become an English teacher, and the main reason I want to become an English teacher is that I really love English.

Multiple issues: 'thinks' should be 'think'; 'myself have' is incorrect pronoun and verb combination—use 'I have'; 'abilities' better as singular 'ability' or 'abilities' with plural verb agreement; 'an English teachers' should be 'an English teacher' (singular); 'main reasons' should be 'main reason' to match singular verb phrase. Suggestion: use correct verb forms, subject pronoun 'I', singular/plural agreement, and 'an' before vowel sound.