Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrases that affect naturalness. For example, "he always try" should be "he always tries," and "keep in the loop" is informal and slightly unclear here. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: My favorite teacher is my English teacher because he is very encouraging and patient. Moreover, he consistently supports us by providing helpful feedback, which motivates me to improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the phrase "I'm not still in touch" is awkward; it would be better to say "I'm not still in touch" as "I'm not in touch anymore" or "I don't keep in touch." Also, avoid filler words like "uh." Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly to improve coherence.

例: I am no longer in touch with my primary school teacher, but since my sister attends the same school, I often see my former teachers during parent-teacher meetings. It's always nice to catch up with them.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. For example, "helps me to deeply involve with learning progress" is awkward; consider "helps me become more engaged in my learning." Also, use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details to enrich your answer.

例: My favorite teacher helps me become more engaged in my learning by giving detailed feedback on my assignments, which helps me understand my mistakes and improve.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear, especially the last part. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid trailing off. Also, explain your reasons more clearly and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future. Although I considered it before, I realized that communicating effectively with children and parents from diverse cultural backgrounds can be challenging for me.

× I think he's a guiding light and he always try to keep in the loop and help us to make progress.

✓ I think he's a guiding light and he always tries to keep in the loop and help us to make progress.

The verb 'try' should be in the third person singular form 'tries' to agree with the singular subject 'he'. In English, verbs in the present tense add an 's' or 'es' for third person singular subjects.

× I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher, however, my sister attends the same school, uh, that I did, so I often see my older teachers during parent teacher meetings.

✓ I'm still not in touch with my primary school teacher, however, my sister attends the same school that I did, so I often see my older teachers during parent teacher meetings.

The phrase 'I'm not still in touch' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I'm still not in touch'. The adverb 'still' should come before 'not' to properly convey the intended meaning.

× In my opinion, he helps me to deeply involve with learning progress and he always gives me feedback about my work that's really helpful.

✓ In my opinion, he helps me to be deeply involved with the learning progress and he always gives me feedback about my work that's really helpful.

The verb 'involve' is incorrectly used here. The correct form is 'be involved with' to express participation or engagement. Also, 'the learning progress' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular progress.

× No, I don't. I considered it before, but when I thought about it I found out I can talk with children and parents who have a different background in culture and behavior and the.

✓ No, I don't. I considered it before, but when I thought about it, I found out I cannot talk with children and parents who have different backgrounds in culture and behavior.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I found out I can talk' contradicts the intended meaning of not wanting to be a teacher. It should be 'I cannot talk'. Also, 'a different background' should be plural 'different backgrounds' to match 'children and parents'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and the', which is removed for clarity.