Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Bhutan), try to make your answer more concise and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, my favourite teacher was my biology teacher in high school because she made lessons interesting and easy to understand. Moreover, her teaching motivated me to study harder and enjoy learning science.

提案: In English (Bhutan), focus on clear sentence structure and correct word forms. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: My primary school teacher, Ukinchoden, was very enthusiastic and encouraging. She motivated me to study hard and aim high. Unfortunately, we have lost contact now.

提案: In English (Bhutan), try to organize your answer with clear sentences and avoid incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to explain how your teacher helped you with specific examples.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by giving valuable advice whenever I faced difficulties. She taught me the importance of resilience, which helped me overcome challenges. Because of her support, I am who I am today.

提案: In English (Bhutan), use correct verb forms and sentence structures. Start with a clear statement, then add reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I would love to become a teacher in the near future because teachers enlighten students with knowledge. Also, being a teacher is interesting since you can interact with students and motivate them to learn.

× Of course, back then when I was in primary school, middle school, high school and all, I have a favorite teacher.

✓ Of course, back then when I was in primary school, middle school, high school and all, I had a favorite teacher.

The sentence refers to a past time ('back then'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'had' instead of present tense 'have' to maintain tense consistency.

× Her lesson is perfectly blending with our knowledge and it motivate us to keep going and.

✓ Her lesson perfectly blends with our knowledge and it motivates us to keep going.

The phrase 'is perfectly blending' is incorrect here; the simple present 'perfectly blends' is appropriate to describe a habitual action. Also, 'motivate' should be 'motivates' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected for clarity.

× During my primary school, there was my one medal, her name is Ukinchoden.

✓ During my primary school, there was one teacher, her name was Ukinchoden.

The phrase 'there was my one medal' is unclear and incorrect. Likely, the student meant 'one teacher'. Also, 'her name is' should be 'her name was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× She is a very enthusiasm and encouragement person who motivated me to study hard, study harder and become somebody in my life.

✓ She is a very enthusiastic and encouraging person who motivated me to study hard, study harder and become somebody in my life.

The adjectives 'enthusiasm' and 'encouragement' are nouns; the correct adjectives are 'enthusiastic' and 'encouraging' to describe a person.

× Whenever I'm at my lowest point, she always stepped forward and helped me due to her valuable advice and she's the one who taught me the importance of resilience at your during your sit back.

✓ Whenever I was at my lowest point, she always stepped forward and helped me with her valuable advice, and she was the one who taught me the importance of resilience during my setbacks.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I'm' with past tense 'stepped' and 'helped'. It should be consistent in past tense. Also, 'at your during your sit back' is unclear and corrected to 'during my setbacks' for clarity.

× Whatever I'm today, it's all because of her and.

✓ Whatever I am today, it's all because of her.

The sentence was incomplete and 'I'm' should be expanded to 'I am' for clarity. The trailing 'and' was removed to complete the sentence properly.

× Yes, I would love to become a teacher in near future because teacher is a person who enlighted the knowledge inside you.

✓ Yes, I would love to become a teacher in the near future because a teacher is a person who enlightens the knowledge inside you.

'In near future' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Teacher' needs the article 'a' to refer to a general person. 'Enlighted' is incorrect; the correct present tense verb is 'enlightens' to agree with singular subject 'a teacher'.

× Being a teacher it's quite interesting since you will get able to be interacting with your students and you are the one who would be motivating.

✓ Being a teacher is quite interesting since you will be able to interact with your students and you are the one who would be motivating them.

The phrase 'you will get able to be interacting' is incorrect; it should be 'you will be able to interact'. Also, 'would be motivating' needs an object 'them' to complete the meaning.