Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher who was very kind and helpful to me. She always gave me clear guidance and feedback on my work. I first met her when I was in school, and I still remember her support fondly.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Use a clear topic sentence to answer the question directly, then add specific reasons or examples with linking words. Make sure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher. I try to contact her whenever I have free time because it gives me a sense of belonging and support. Maintaining this connection is very important to me.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain specifically how your teacher helped you using linking words. Use complete sentences and avoid repetition.

例: When I was in school, I was not very good at math. However, my favourite teacher helped me a lot by explaining difficult concepts clearly and giving me extra practice. Because of her support, I improved significantly.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers and hesitations which reduce naturalness. Try to speak more fluently and confidently. Use linking words to connect your ideas and keep your answer concise and clear.

例: I might become a teacher in the future because I really like this profession. It is closely connected with knowledge and skills, and it gives me the opportunity to teach the next generation. Therefore, I think it would be a very rewarding job.

× Certainly I have a teacher who is very amicable for me and she always give me a proper guideline and feet make about my work.

✓ Certainly I have a teacher who is very amicable to me and she always gives me proper guidance and feedback about my work.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when describing someone being amicable towards another. Also, 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'she'. 'Guideline' should be 'guidance' and 'feet make' is incorrect; the intended word is 'feedback'. Use 'feedback' to describe comments on work.

× Certainly I have a teacher who is very amicable for me and she always give me a proper guideline and feet make about my work.

✓ Certainly I have a teacher who is very amicable to me and she always gives me proper guidance and feedback about my work.

The verb 'give' must be in third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

× When I was in school that time I made for her for the first time and currently we are.

✓ When I was in school, I met her for the first time and currently we are in touch.

The phrase 'I made for her' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'met'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'in touch' completes the meaning. Also, adding commas improves clarity.

× Absolutely, I always try to connect with my primary school teacher even in in every spare of my life I got any teacher I always try to connect with them since it gives a sense of belonging and.

✓ Absolutely, I always try to connect with my primary school teacher. In every spare moment of my life, if I meet any teacher, I always try to connect with them since it gives a sense of belonging.

The phrase 'in in every spare of my life' is incorrect; it should be 'in every spare moment of my life'. The sentence was run-on and incomplete; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'Got any teacher' is incorrect; 'if I meet any teacher' is appropriate.

× Well, when I was in school, I was not that much. Excel in math. So that time my teacher helped me a lot. Her assistance gave gave me a.

✓ Well, when I was in school, I was not very good at math. At that time, my teacher helped me a lot. Her assistance gave me a lot of support.

The phrase 'I was not that much. Excel in math.' is incorrect and incomplete. It should be 'I was not very good at math.' 'Gave gave me a.' is a repetition and incomplete; corrected to 'gave me a lot of support.'

× Umm, possibly. I'm not sure about it, but uh, I am very fond of, uh, this profession, uh, since, uh, it's uh, very connected with knowledge and skills and I can get a chance to teach our future generation. So it would be a very good job.

✓ Umm, possibly. I'm not sure about it, but I am very fond of this profession since it is very connected with knowledge and skills, and I can get a chance to teach our future generation. So it would be a very good job.

The sentence is mostly correct but removing unnecessary fillers like 'uh' improves clarity. The modal verb 'would' is correctly used to express possibility in the future.