Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "really helped me a lot" and "normally just really willing". Also, use correct grammar, for example, "a difficulties" should be "difficulties". Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher from university who has been very supportive. She often helps me with personal difficulties and is always willing to assist, which I really appreciate.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Avoid repetition like "now currently" and "our our". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and be more specific about why you are not in touch. Also, correct grammar such as "on nowadays" should be "nowadays".

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because our lifestyles have changed a lot over the years, and it has been a long time since we last communicated.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Avoid filler words like "umm" and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically. Try to complete your thoughts fully.

例: When I was a sophomore, I was confused about my future career, so I made an appointment with her. We discussed my options, and she shared practical advice to help me plan my career path.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid filler words like "uh" and use correct verb forms. Structure your answer with a clear statement and supporting explanation. Use linking words to improve coherence and be more specific about your career aspirations.

例: I do not plan to become a teacher in the future. I have not considered a career in education, and it is not one of my personal aspirations.

× My favorite teacher is my university lecture and she really helped me a lot especially when I have a difficulties in my daily life and she normally just really willing to provide any help to assist me so I think she is really accommodating.

✓ My favorite teacher is my university lecturer and she really helped me a lot especially when I have difficulties in my daily life and she is normally really willing to provide any help to assist me so I think she is really accommodating.

The word 'lecture' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'lecturer' to refer to a university teacher. Also, 'a difficulties' is incorrect because 'difficulties' is plural and should not have the article 'a'. The correct form is simply 'difficulties'. Additionally, 'she normally just really willing' lacks the verb 'is' to form the present tense; it should be 'she is normally really willing'. These corrections ensure proper singular/plural usage and correct verb forms.

× she normally just really willing to provide any help to assist me so I think she is really accommodating.

✓ she is normally really willing to provide any help to assist me so I think she is really accommodating.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' needed for the present tense third person singular form. 'She normally just really willing' is incorrect; it should be 'she is normally really willing' to maintain correct present tense verb agreement.

× Now currently I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher on the first point is our our lifestyle is totally different and it has been a really long time.

✓ Currently, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher because our lifestyles are totally different and it has been a really long time.

The phrase 'on the first point is' is awkward and incorrect; it should be replaced with 'because' to explain the reason. Also, 'our our lifestyle' is a repetition and should be 'our lifestyles' (plural) to match the plural subject. These changes improve clarity and correct present tense usage.

× Now currently I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher on the first point is our our lifestyle is totally different and it has been a really long time.

✓ Currently, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher because our lifestyles are totally different and it has been a really long time.

The word 'lifestyle' should be plural 'lifestyles' because it refers to the different ways of life of two people. Also, removing the repeated 'our' corrects the plural noun usage.

× So it's really hard for us to contact our previous teacher on nowadays.

✓ So it's really hard for us to contact our previous teacher nowadays.

The preposition 'on' before 'nowadays' is incorrect. 'Nowadays' is an adverb and does not require a preposition. Removing 'on' corrects the sentence.

× I remember when I was sophomore I really umm confused about my future career so I make appointment with her and so we just chatted each other and then share some practical on plan for me to uh.

✓ I remember when I was a sophomore I was really confused about my future career so I made an appointment with her and we just chatted with each other and then she shared some practical plans for me.

Several past tense errors: 'make' should be 'made' to match past tense; 'chatted each other' is incorrect, it should be 'chatted with each other'; 'share' should be 'shared' to maintain past tense; 'on plan' is incorrect, it should be 'plans'. Also, 'a sophomore' requires the article 'a'. These corrections ensure proper past tense and preposition usage.

× we just chatted each other

✓ we just chatted with each other

The verb 'chat' requires the preposition 'with' when referring to the person one is talking to. Therefore, 'chatted each other' is incorrect; it should be 'chatted with each other'.

× then share some practical on plan for me to uh.

✓ then she shared some practical plans for me.

The phrase 'on plan' is incorrect; it should be 'plans' without 'on'. Also, the subject 'she' is added for clarity. This corrects the preposition misuse and improves sentence clarity.

× Being a teacher is not my plan in mind actually I haven't thought about I will be county trainer future and uh I still haven't any planned about into educator so I guess it would not become my personal aspiration anymore.

✓ Being a teacher is not my plan; actually, I haven't thought about becoming a county trainer in the future and I still don't have any plans to become an educator, so I guess it will not become my personal aspiration anymore.

Several modal and verb form errors: 'I haven't thought about I will be' is incorrect; it should be 'I haven't thought about becoming'. 'I still haven't any planned' is incorrect; it should be 'I still don't have any plans'. 'About into educator' is incorrect; it should be 'to become an educator'. Also, 'would not' is better as 'will not' to express future intention. These corrections fix modal verb usage and verb forms.