Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は基本的な内容を含んでいますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「the teacher major in art」は「who majored in art」に修正し、文をより自然にする必要があります。また、文を分けて明確にし、詳細を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I had a favorite teacher who majored in art. He expanded my horizons and always encouraged me by saying, "Good job on your artwork." His support really motivated me to improve.

提案: 回答が不完全で文法的にも不自然です。「I met」ではなく「I meet her sometimes when I go back to my hometown」と表現し、文を完結させる必要があります。また、話の流れをスムーズにするために接続詞を使いましょう。

例: No, I'm not in regular contact with my primary school teacher. However, I sometimes meet her when I go back to my hometown.

提案: 内容は良いですが、表現が不自然で冗長な部分があります。「he has a heartwarming smile to me」は「he always had a warm smile that made me feel relaxed」に修正し、より自然な英語にしましょう。

例: My favorite teacher always listened to my opinions and had a warm smile that made me feel relaxed and comfortable in class.

提案: 回答が途中で終わっており、内容が不明瞭です。理由を明確に述べ、文を完結させることが重要です。また、話の流れを良くするために接続詞を使い、具体的な説明を加えましょう。

例: I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I am not good at working in groups at school. I prefer to work independently rather than managing a classroom.

× Yes, I had a favorite teacher, the teacher major in art, the teacher expand my world and he always say to me a good job on your artwork.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher, the teacher majored in art, the teacher expanded my world and he always said to me 'Good job on your artwork.'

The verbs 'major', 'expand', and 'say' should be in the past tense 'majored', 'expanded', and 'said' to match the past tense context of the sentence.

× No, no I'm not. Umm, my primary school teacher, uh, is woman and uh. Sometimes I go back to hometown I met but uh.

✓ No, no I'm not. Umm, my primary school teacher is a woman. Sometimes when I go back to my hometown, I meet her.

The pronoun 'is woman' is missing an article 'a' and the sentence structure is incomplete. Also, 'I met' should be 'I meet her' to indicate present tense and correct object pronoun usage.

× My favorite teacher always listened to my opinions and uh, he has a heartwarming smile to me. I really, umm, relaxed.

✓ My favorite teacher always listened to my opinions and he has a heartwarming smile for me. I really, umm, felt relaxed.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect with 'smile'; it should be 'smile for me'. Also, 'relaxed' should be 'felt relaxed' to correctly express the feeling.

× I don't want to be a teacher. It is because umm, in school, uh, I'm not good at umm, staying uh, in a group. So uh, I so if I.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher because, umm, in school, I'm not good at staying in a group. So, if I...

The sentence is incomplete and has unnecessary fillers. The phrase 'staying in a group' is correct, but the sentence should be completed for clarity.