Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和重复，且信息表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并明确表达老师的帮助内容。

例: Yes, my favorite teacher is from my university. He has given me valuable advice about my studies and helped me a lot whenever I faced difficulties. He also encouraged me not to be afraid of challenges.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚表达是否保持联系及原因。

例: Yes, I met my primary school teacher last year. He was very important to me because he helped me a lot when I was a child. However, I am not very good at keeping in touch with people.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议完整表达老师如何帮助自己，并使用连贯的句子。

例: When I was a child, I was afraid to communicate with others. My teacher noticed this and encouraged me to make friends. She also taught me some ways to improve my social skills.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达混乱，且最后一句话含义不明。建议理清思路，明确表达想成为老师的原因，避免矛盾和错误。

例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because it is a valuable job. Teachers can help many people and have a positive influence on their lives.

× he gives my son suggestions about my study and give me a lot of help when I meet meet when I meet difficulties

✓ he gives me suggestions about my study and gives me a lot of help when I meet difficulties

这里'son'（儿子）与上下文不符，应该是指学生本人，因此改为'me'。另外，动词与主语不一致，'he gives'后面动词应保持一致，改为'gives'。

× and she also tells me don't afraid.

✓ and she also tells me not to be afraid.

'don't afraid'是不正确的表达，应该用不定式结构'not to be afraid'。

× last year I meet my primary school teacher

✓ last year I met my primary school teacher

表示过去发生的动作，动词应使用过去式，'meet'应改为'met'。

× I'm late on, I'm not, not good at uh, touch with.

✓ I'm late, I'm not good at keeping in touch.

表达不清晰，'late on'用法错误，应改为'keeping in touch'表示保持联系。

× When I was a child I'm afraid to communicate with others

✓ When I was a child I was afraid to communicate with others

描述过去的状态，动词时态应为过去式，'I'm'应改为'was'。

× my teacher knows what he encouraged me to make friends with others

✓ my teacher knew that he encouraged me to make friends with others

时态不一致，描述过去事件，'knows'应改为'knew'，并且'what'应改为'that'。

× and she tells me some some ways to how to make friends and she also.

✓ and she told me some ways how to make friends.

时态应为过去式，'tells'改为'told'，句子不完整，去掉多余部分。

× the teacher can give others many helps and period to be and the teacher can influence the many people

✓ the teacher can give others much help and can influence many people

'helps'应为不可数名词'help'，'period to be'无意义，应删除，'the many people'中定冠词'the'多余。

× I think to be a teacher is a very bad thing.

✓ I think being a teacher is a very good thing.

'bad'与上下文意思不符，应为'good'，表达积极态度。