Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In this answer, you should improve grammar and sentence structure to make your response more natural and clear. For example, use 'a very good teacher' instead of 'a very teacher' and keep verb tenses consistent. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: In high school, I had a very good teacher named Mr. Salty. I liked him because he was friendly, kind, and compassionate to students. Since he was a math teacher, I enjoyed talking to him about different problems and concepts.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and completion. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve vocabulary usage. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect ideas. Try to be more specific about how the teacher shares tips and how it benefits you.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher because we often communicate through social media, such as chatting and phone calls. Also, my teacher shares useful educational tips and life experiences, which help me learn and grow.

提案: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct grammar, especially with verb forms and prepositions. Use linking words like 'especially' or 'for example' to clarify your points. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

例: My favourite teacher helped me a lot in high school, especially when I did not understand exercises. For example, he would explain the problems clearly and make sure I understood the questions before moving on.

提案: This answer needs clearer expression and better grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like 'like us a future it would be happy.' Use linking words to explain reasons logically. Also, use plural forms correctly and improve vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher in the future because it would make me happy and provide challenges. For example, teachers help students improve their knowledge, which is very rewarding.

× In high school I had a very teacher.

✓ In high school I had a very good teacher.

The sentence is missing an adjective before 'teacher' to make sense. Adding 'good' corrects the sentence. The original sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× His name is Salty.

✓ His name was Salty.

Since the student is talking about a teacher from high school (past), the verb should be in past tense to maintain consistency.

× I like him so much because he was friendly and he is kind and compassionate to the student.

✓ I liked him so much because he was friendly and he was kind and compassionate to the students.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the teacher is from the past, all verbs should be in past tense. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students' to refer generally.

× he is kind and compassionate to the student.

✓ he was kind and compassionate to the students.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' because it refers to more than one student in general.

× He is a math teacher so I enjoy talking to him very much.

✓ He was a math teacher so I enjoyed talking to him very much.

The student is referring to a past teacher, so verbs should be in past tense for consistency.

× Yes, I think I am staying in touch with my primary school teacher because we usually communicate through social media like chatting or phoning.

✓ Yes, I think I am staying in touch with my primary school teacher because we usually communicate through social media like chatting or phoning.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense as it refers to current ongoing action.

× Additionally, I think primary school teacher always share educational tips and experiences of life so I think it's make my.

✓ Additionally, I think my primary school teacher always shares educational tips and life experiences, so I think it helps me.

'Primary school teacher' needs a possessive pronoun 'my'. 'Teacher' is singular, so the verb should be 'shares'. The phrase 'it's make my' is unclear and corrected to 'it helps me' for clarity.

× The teacher helped me a lot when I was in high school, but when I think it is important for me was when I didn't understand the exercise.

✓ The teacher helped me a lot when I was in high school, but I think the most important time was when I didn't understand the exercise.

The sentence structure is awkward. Changing 'when I think it is important for me was' to 'I think the most important time was' improves clarity and tense consistency.

× So I think at that moment the the teacher tried to explain me clearly, make sure that I understand that question and so.

✓ So I think at that moment the teacher tried to explain to me clearly, making sure that I understood the question.

The verb 'explain' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'make sure' should be 'making sure' to connect properly. 'Understand' should be past tense 'understood' to match the past context.

× Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher in the future because like us a future it would be happy and it make me feel more challenging but also bring pleasure.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher in the future because I think the future would be happy and it would make me feel more challenged but also bring pleasure.

The sentence has tense and structure issues. 'Like us a future' is unclear and corrected to 'I think the future'. 'Make' should be 'would make' to match conditional future. 'Feel more challenging' should be 'feel more challenged' to use correct adjective form.

× For example, teacher help student to improve their knowledge.

✓ For example, teachers help students to improve their knowledge.

'Teacher' and 'student' should be plural to refer generally. Also, 'help' should be 'help' for plural subject 'teachers' which is correct.