Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强句子结构的准确性和逻辑性，避免冗余。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持观点。

例: My favourite teacher is my high school history teacher. He always encouraged me to persevere and do my best. Without his guidance, I wouldn't have achieved such good grades in my final exam.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议使用更准确的表达方式，并注意连贯性。可以用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher because when I was a child, technology was not advanced. Therefore, we didn't exchange phone numbers or social media contacts, so we can only meet face to face.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯，建议使用完整句子并合理使用连接词，避免重复。内容应更具体。

例: My favourite teacher helped me by encouraging me to persevere and do my best. He also told me that nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it. He gave me a lot of support and advice to help me understand difficult topics.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但语法和句子结构有待改进。建议使用更连贯的句子，并避免断句不完整。

例: I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I think my speaking skills are not very good. For example, I find it difficult to express my opinions clearly, which is important for teaching. Moreover, I am not a very patient person, so I don't think I have the ability to be a good teacher.

× We who always encouraged me to persevere and do my best without his guidance.

✓ He always encouraged me to persevere and do my best with his guidance.

原句中使用了“we who”，主语不明确且与后文不符，应改为“he”指代老师。同时，句意应为老师给予指导，故将“without his guidance”改为“with his guidance”。

× I would not try achieve such a good grades in my final exam.

✓ I would not have tried to achieve such good grades in my final exam.

“would not try achieve”结构不正确，应该使用完成时态“would not have tried”表示过去未发生的动作，且“try”后应接不定式“to achieve”。“grades”前不需要冠词“a”，且“good grades”是复数。

× So we don't exchange our phone number and other social medical contacts.

✓ So we didn't exchange phone numbers or other social media contacts.

“don't”应改为过去时“didn't”，因为描述的是过去的情况。应使用复数“phone numbers”，且“social medical”应为“social media”。

× The only way we can contact with each other with face to face.

✓ The only way we can contact each other is face to face.

“contact”是及物动词，不需要介词“with”。“with face to face”结构错误，应改为“is face to face”。

× And he also, told me a sense nothing is impossible.

✓ And he also told me a saying: nothing is impossible.

“a sense”用词错误，应为“a saying”表示“谚语、格言”。逗号位置错误，应去掉逗号。

× If you put your hand into it.

✓ If you put your hand to it.

习惯表达是“put your hand to it”，表示投入努力。

× He gave me a lot of support and advice advice so that I can understand.

✓ He gave me a lot of support and advice so that I could understand.

“advice”不可数名词，重复出现是错误。动词时态应与上下文一致，改为过去时“could”。

× I think my speaking skills isn't very good.

✓ I think my speaking skills aren't very good.

“skills”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“aren't”。

× So, which is important for teaching.

✓ Which is important for teaching.

句子开头的“so”与后文不连贯，应去掉。

× Moreover, I'm not a very patient person, so I think I don't have the ability.

✓ Moreover, I'm not a very patient person, so I think I don't have the ability to do it.

句子缺少宾语，导致表达不完整，应补充“to do it”或具体内容。