Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but avoid redundancy and minor grammatical errors. For example, 'Her name is Mrs. Ranjit Kaur' can be combined with the first sentence for better flow. Also, avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'Thanks to her encouragement' without proper connection. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is Mrs. Ranjit Kaur, my math professor, who inspired me greatly with her passionate teaching style and clear explanations of complex concepts. Because of her encouragement, I decided to pursue a career in mathematics.

提案: Your answer is informative but can be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and using linking words for coherence. For example, 'Apart from this' can be replaced with 'Besides that' or 'In addition'. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teachers through WhatsApp. I usually connect with them on special occasions like birthdays or festivals. Besides that, sometimes I visit the school to meet them in person and express my gratitude, as they played a major role in my formative years.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words to improve clarity and coherence. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement. For example, combine sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'as'.

例: Math became one of my favourite subjects because of her teaching style. She used differentiated instruction to cater to the needs and weaknesses of each student, which inspired me greatly and helped me solve logical and complex equations even when I was young.

提案: Your answer is informative but does not directly answer the question about your future aspirations. Try to start with a clear topic sentence addressing whether you want to be a teacher in the future, then provide supporting details. Also, correct minor grammatical errors such as 'this various disabilities' to 'various disabilities'.

例: Yes, I want to continue being a teacher in the future. Currently, I work as a special educator in an organisation where I train children with various disabilities, including cerebral palsy, intellectual disability, blindness, autism, and ADHD.

× Yes, my favorite teacher is my math professor, Her name is Mrs. Ranjit Kaur.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is my math professor. Her name is Mrs. Ranjit Kaur.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a comma to join two independent clauses, which is a comma splice error. It should be corrected by replacing the comma with a period to separate the two sentences properly.

× I am still in touch with my primary school teachers through WhatsApp.

✓ I am still in touch with my primary school teacher through WhatsApp.

The question asks about a singular 'primary school teacher', so the answer should refer to a singular noun 'teacher' instead of plural 'teachers' to maintain consistency.

× Apart from this, sometime I also visit the school to meet them in person and show my gratitude towards them as they play a major role in my formative years.

✓ Apart from this, sometimes I also visit the school to meet them in person and show my gratitude towards them as they played a major role in my formative years.

The adverb 'sometime' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'play' should be in past tense 'played' because it refers to a past period 'formative years'.

× The way she used differentiated instructions according to the student to cater the needs and weakness of each and everybody.

✓ The way she used differentiated instructions according to the students to cater to the needs and weaknesses of each and everybody.

The preposition 'to' is required after 'cater' to form the correct phrase 'cater to'. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students' to match 'each and everybody', and 'weakness' should be plural 'weaknesses' to agree with 'needs'.

× It really inspires me and helped me a lot to solve logical and complex equations at that time when I was so young.

✓ It really inspired me and helped me a lot to solve logical and complex equations at that time when I was so young.

The sentence refers to a past time 'at that time when I was so young', so the verbs should be in past tense 'inspired' and 'helped' for consistency.

× I am a special educator in an organization where I train children with special needs which includes this various disabilities like cerebral palsy, intellectual disability, blindness, autism, ADHD.

✓ I am a special educator in an organization where I train children with special needs which include various disabilities like cerebral palsy, intellectual disability, blindness, autism, ADHD.

The verb 'includes' should be 'include' to agree with the plural subject 'special needs'. Also, 'this' before 'various disabilities' is incorrect and should be removed.