Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but a bit lengthy and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two specific details using linking words for coherence. Also, avoid grammatical errors like 'brings toffee with us' and use correct prepositions.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher who taught science in eighth grade. She was very kind and often brought toffees for the class, which made learning enjoyable.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete. Try to give a clear and direct response first, then explain reasons with linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar for better understanding.

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because I moved to a different city for college. Later, I started playing rugby in various states, which made it difficult to keep contact.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific examples using linking words. Also, avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by simplifying difficult science concepts. For example, she taught me a mnemonic to remember the periodic table elements, which made learning easier and more fun.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your reasons and plans.

例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future. Currently, I am saving money to pursue this goal because I want to help students who struggle to understand by creating mnemonic techniques.

× she always brings toffee with us and to give everyone

✓ she always brings toffee with her and gives it to everyone

The phrase 'brings toffee with us' is incorrect because 'us' is an object pronoun and does not fit here; it should be 'her' to indicate she brings toffee along. Also, 'to give everyone' is incorrect; it should be 'gives it to everyone' to maintain subject-verb agreement and correct verb form.

× No, we are not still in touch with my primary school teacher

✓ No, we are not still in touch with my primary school teacher

The phrase 'not still in touch' is awkward; the correct expression is 'not in touch' or 'still not in touch'. However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes from the provided list, and this is more of a style issue, no correction is applied here.

× after my college I start playing rugby different States

✓ after my college I started playing rugby in different States

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time frame indicated by 'after my college'. Also, the preposition 'in' is needed before 'different States' to indicate location.

× after my college I start playing rugby different States

✓ after my college I started playing rugby in different States

The preposition 'in' is missing before 'different States' to correctly indicate the location where the action took place.

× she made her she made very easy to learning

✓ she made it very easy to learn

The phrase 'to learning' is incorrect; after 'easy to' the base form of the verb 'learn' should be used, not the gerund 'learning'. Also, 'she made her' is unclear and should be 'she made it' referring to the concept.

× like hydrogen, helium with a Berlin carbon, nitrogen, oxygen, fluorine look

✓ like hydrogen, helium, beryllium, carbon, nitrogen, oxygen, fluorine; I still remember it

The phrase is unclear and contains errors such as 'a Berlin' which should be 'beryllium'. Also, the sentence structure is incomplete and confusing; it needs proper listing and punctuation to be clear.

× Yes, I do want to be a teacher in my future. That's what I'm doing right now.

✓ Yes, I do want to be a teacher in the future. That's what I want to do right now.

The phrase 'in my future' is less natural than 'in the future'. Also, 'That's what I'm doing right now' conflicts with the future intention; it should be 'That's what I want to do right now' to express current intention.

× I'm so I'm after my earn and saving I I'm going to become a teacher

✓ So after earning and saving, I am going to become a teacher

The phrase 'I'm so I'm after my earn and saving' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be 'after earning and saving' using the gerund form to indicate the action before becoming a teacher.

× and I'm going to help lot of students like me

✓ and I'm going to help a lot of students like me

The quantifier 'lot of' requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct: 'a lot of'.