Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为简单，缺少连贯的连接词和具体细节。建议在回答中使用连接词如“because”或“so”，并具体说明老师如何鼓励你。

例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my biology teacher in middle school because she was very kind and always encouraged me to study hard. For example, she would give me extra help after class, which made me love biology even more.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，且回答缺乏连贯性。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teacher because I didn't like writing letters at that time, and it has been a long time since then.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不完整，缺少逻辑连接。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达老师如何帮助你，并使用连接词。

例: My biology teacher helped me by teaching us interesting things like how to feed a butterfly, which made me interested in biology. Also, when I got a bad grade and felt disappointed, she comforted me and encouraged me to try harder.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达愿望，并用连接词说明原因。

例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I am interested in biology and I study it in high school. If possible, I would like to return to my middle school and become a biology teacher.

× No, at the time I was in primary school, I don't have A and I don't like to write letters to other people, so I don't have any touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ No, at the time I was in primary school, I didn't have A and I didn't like to write letters to other people, so I didn't have any contact with my primary school teacher.

这里描述的是过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。'don't have'和'don't like'应改为'didn't have'和'didn't like'，'don't have any touch'应改为'didn't have any contact'，'touch'用法不当，应使用'contact'表示联系。

× No, at the time I was in primary school, I don't have A and I don't like to write letters to other people, so I don't have any touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ No, at the time I was in primary school, I didn't have A and I didn't like to write letters to other people, so I didn't have any contact with my primary school teacher.

'have any touch with'是不正确的搭配，应该用'have contact with'表示与某人保持联系。

× I still remember my biology teacher taught us how to feed a butterfly and that makes me interested in biology and she and one day I don't have a good grade and I'm very disappointed she come for me and gave me.

✓ I still remember my biology teacher taught us how to feed a butterfly, which made me interested in biology. One day, I didn't get a good grade and I was very disappointed. She came to me and encouraged me.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词和标点，导致句意不清。需要拆分成多个句子，使用正确的时态和连接词，使表达清晰。

× I still remember my biology teacher taught us how to feed a butterfly and that makes me interested in biology and she and one day I don't have a good grade and I'm very disappointed she come for me and gave me.

✓ I still remember my biology teacher taught us how to feed a butterfly, which made me interested in biology. One day, I didn't get a good grade and I was very disappointed. She came to me and encouraged me.

描述过去发生的事情时，动词应使用过去时态，如'made','didn't get','was','came'等。

× Yes, as I say I have interested in biology and I study biology in my high school. I if if I can I want to go back to my middle school and be a biology teacher too.

✓ Yes, as I said, I am interested in biology and I study biology in my high school. If I can, I want to go back to my middle school and be a biology teacher too.

'as I say'应为过去时'as I said'，'I have interested'应为'I am interested'，'I if if I can'语序错误，应为'If I can'。

× Yes, as I say I have interested in biology and I study biology in my high school. I if if I can I want to go back to my middle school and be a biology teacher too.

✓ Yes, as I said, I am interested in biology and I study biology in my high school. If I can, I want to go back to my middle school and be a biology teacher too.

'I have interested'是错误的表达，正确应为'I am interested'，表示现在的状态。