Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, bạn nên dùng thì đúng ("gives" thay vì "give"), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I am want to be" và nên làm câu rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher who was my English teacher in high school. She not only gave me important knowledge but also inspired me to become a better person.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và câu trôi chảy hơn. Ví dụ, "I grow up" nên là "I have grown up" hoặc "I grew up". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể thêm liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Actually, I am not in touch with her anymore because I have grown up and now live far from my hometown. However, I hope to meet her someday in the future.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Bạn nên tránh nói lặp lại và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc. Ví dụ, "she often holds online courses to help me summarize important knowledge before exams."

例: She helped me a lot. For example, before exams, she often held online courses to help us summarize the important knowledge.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngập ngừng như "uh", "umm" trong bài nói. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ và sửa lỗi nhỏ như "empathize for" thành "empathize with".

例: Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher in the future. Firstly, I love children because they are adorable. Secondly, I want to be someone who can empathize with and listen to others.

× Well, she not only give me important knowledge but also inspired me to be a better person and I am want to be.

✓ Well, she not only gives me important knowledge but also inspires me to be a better person and I want to be.

The verbs 'give' and 'inspired' do not agree with the third person singular subject 'she'. In present tense, verbs with third person singular subjects require an 's' at the end (gives, inspires). Also, 'I am want to be' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to be' because 'want' is a stative verb and does not use 'am' before it.

× Actually, not anymore. In fact, I grow up and I live far from my hometown so I don't have time to meet her, but I always want to meet her in the future.

✓ Actually, not anymore. In fact, I grew up and I live far from my hometown so I don't have time to meet her, but I always want to meet her in the future.

The verb 'grow' should be in the past tense 'grew' because it refers to a completed action in the past. 'I grow up' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'I grew up'.

× She helped me a lot, I mean well in when I have exams she often holds online course to teach to summarize important knowledge.

✓ She helped me a lot. I mean, when I have exams, she often holds online courses to help summarize important knowledge.

The phrase 'well in when' is incorrect and confusing; it should be simplified to 'when'. Also, 'holds online course' should be plural 'courses' to match the context. The preposition 'to teach to summarize' is awkward; 'to help summarize' is clearer and more appropriate.

× Secondly, I want to be a person who can empathize for and listen to anyone.

✓ Secondly, I want to be a person who can empathize with and listen to anyone.

The verb 'empathize' is followed by the preposition 'with', not 'for'. Using 'empathize for' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'empathize with' someone.