Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意句子结构，避免语法错误，并且使表达更自然流畅。可以适当增加连接词，使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, my favorite teacher is actually my fishing guide, who is also my friend. He is very knowledgeable and patient, and he taught me how to use different kinds of fishing tackle. Even when I make mistakes, he always helps me improve.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，存在语法错误。建议回答时注意完整表达意思，使用正确的时态和句子结构，并且避免句子残缺。

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher because he is now teaching my two children. We often communicate about their schoolwork and share stories.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，表达不够清晰。建议注意单复数形式和拼写，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并且具体说明帮助的方式。

例: My favorite teacher, who is also my fishing guide, usually shows me how to use different kinds of fishing equipment. He explains the techniques clearly and gives me opportunities to practice.

提案: 回答中表达不够准确，存在语法错误，且“low interaction”用词不当。建议使用正确的表达方式，明确说明喜欢教学的原因，并使用恰当的词汇。

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy sharing my experience and knowledge. I also love the active interaction and lively communication between teachers and students.

× He told me how to operate a different kind of a fish and tackle his very knowledgeable and patient even though I sometimes make some mistakes.

✓ He told me how to operate different kinds of fish and tackle. He is very knowledgeable and patient even though I sometimes make some mistakes.

“a different kind of a fish”中“a fish”应为复数形式“fish”，因为这里指多种鱼类。句子结构混乱，需拆分为两句以表达清楚。

× He told me how to operate a different kind of a fish and tackle his very knowledgeable and patient even though I sometimes make some mistakes.

✓ He told me how to operate different kinds of fish and tackle. He is very knowledgeable and patient even though I sometimes make some mistakes.

原句结构混乱，“tackle his very knowledgeable and patient”无意义，需拆分为两句，明确表达“他很有知识且耐心”。

× So we usually communicated with the task of our children and the story of.

✓ So we usually communicate about our children's tasks and stories.

“communicated with the task of our children and the story of”表达不清，且“communicated”时态不合适，应为现在时“communicate”，且“task”应为复数“tasks”，句子需简化明确。

× My favorite teacher who is also my fishing guide usually told me how to operate different kind of efficient echoes by showing me how to do it and he will give me a opertunity to try.

✓ My favorite teacher, who is also my fishing guide, usually tells me how to operate different kinds of efficient echoes by showing me how to do it, and he gives me an opportunity to try.

“told”应为一般现在时“tells”，因为描述习惯动作；“different kind”应为复数“different kinds”；“a opertunity”拼写错误，应为“an opportunity”。

× My favorite teacher who is also my fishing guide usually told me how to operate different kind of efficient echoes by showing me how to do it and he will give me a opertunity to try.

✓ My favorite teacher, who is also my fishing guide, usually tells me how to operate different kinds of efficient echoes by showing me how to do it, and he gives me an opportunity to try.

“different kind”应使用复数形式“different kinds”，表示多种类型。

× he will give me a opertunity to try.

✓ he gives me an opportunity to try.

描述习惯动作时不应使用“will”，应使用一般现在时。

× Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I like to share my own experience and knowledge and also I love low interaction between teachers and learners and in the lively communication.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I like to share my own experience and knowledge, and I also love close interaction between teachers and learners and lively communication.

“low interaction”表达不当，应为“close interaction”表示密切交流；句子中“and in the lively communication”结构不完整，需调整为“and lively communication”。