Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and focused. Avoid unnecessary comments like 'pretty' which are not relevant to the question. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons why she is your favourite teacher.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher who is very kind and supportive. She always encouraged me to do my best and made learning enjoyable.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how you keep in touch.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher. I usually text her on weekdays because she motivates me to achieve my career goals.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve coherence by using linking words. Be more specific about how she helped you and what impact it had on you.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by constantly encouraging me and inspiring me to set high career goals. Because of her positive mindset, I gained confidence and motivation to work hard.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Avoid unnecessary words and be direct in your response. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I have not thought much about becoming a teacher, but if I get the opportunity in the future, I would definitely consider it.

× Definitely, I have my favorite teacher and she is very kind hearted and pretty also.

✓ Definitely, I have my favorite teacher and she is very kind-hearted and pretty as well.

The phrase 'kind hearted' should be hyphenated as 'kind-hearted' because it is a compound adjective describing the teacher. Also, 'pretty also' is awkward; 'pretty as well' or 'pretty too' is more natural in English.

× Well, uh, I think I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher because of on weekdays I usually text her because I think she's the only who motivate me to achieve my career goals.

✓ Well, uh, I think I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher because on weekdays I usually text her since I think she's the only one who motivates me to achieve my career goals.

The phrase 'because of on weekdays' is incorrect; 'because' and 'because of' are not used together. 'Because' is followed by a clause, while 'because of' is followed by a noun or noun phrase. Also, 'the only who motivate me' is missing 'one' and the verb should be 'motivates' to agree with singular subject 'she'.

× Well, uh, I think I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher because of on weekdays I usually text her because I think she's the only who motivate me to achieve my career goals.

✓ Well, uh, I think I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher because on weekdays I usually text her since I think she's the only one who motivates me to achieve my career goals.

The verb 'motivate' should be in third person singular form 'motivates' to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

× Well, my favorite teacher helped me a lot to motivate and inspire me about my achievements and my career goals. And her constant support and encouragement mean a lot to me because I think she's the only person of mine life who is having a positive mindset.

✓ Well, my favorite teacher helped me a lot to motivate and inspire me about my achievements and my career goals. And her constant support and encouragement mean a lot to me because I think she's the only person in my life who has a positive mindset.

The phrase 'person of mine life' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' as in 'in my life'. Also, 'who is having a positive mindset' is better expressed as 'who has a positive mindset' because 'have' is a stative verb and not usually used in continuous form.

× Well, I do not think about that particular job addition, but if I will get up opportunity to become an teacher in future, so I will definitely grab it.

✓ Well, I do not think about that particular job option, but if I get an opportunity to become a teacher in the future, I will definitely grab it.

The word 'addition' is incorrect in this context; 'option' fits better. 'Get up opportunity' is incorrect; it should be 'get an opportunity'. 'An teacher' is incorrect because 'teacher' starts with a consonant sound, so it should be 'a teacher'. Also, 'in future' is better as 'in the future'. The phrase 'if I will get' is incorrect; in conditional sentences, 'if' is followed by present tense, so 'if I get' is correct. The word 'so' is unnecessary and should be removed.