Fishing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct nouns. Also keep to natural phrasing and sentence length (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: I don't really like eating fish. I'm a vegetarian, so I prefer fruits and vegetables instead — for example, cauliflower, potatoes and tomatoes. I choose plant-based foods because I find them fresher and easier to digest.

提案: Answer directly (yes/no) and explain briefly with clear reasons. Use simple, correct vocabulary to describe feelings and experiences, and avoid unclear phrases and invented words. Provide one concrete detail or example about the market if possible.

例: No, I haven't been to a fish market very often. I don't feel comfortable there because of the strong smell and the wet environment. For example, the stalls are often crowded and the fish aroma can be overwhelming.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence about popularity, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar for plural/singular and link ideas with words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep sentences concise and avoid unnecessary linking words at the start.

例: Yes, fishing is quite popular in my country because we have many rivers and coastal areas. Many people fish for both food and leisure; for example, small fishing communities sell their catch at local markets using nets.

× I am good vegetarian person.

✓ I am a good vegetarian.

The original misses the article 'a' and uses 'person' redundantly after 'vegetarian'. 'Vegetarian' here functions as a noun, so use the article 'a' before it. Remove 'person' for naturalness. Suggestion: say 'I am a vegetarian' or 'I am a good vegetarian' if emphasizing quality.

× I love to eat some fruits or vegetables such as a Caillou, cauliflower, potatoes, tomatoes and peas rather than peas.

✓ I love to eat fruits and vegetables such as cauliflower, potatoes, tomatoes and peas.

'a Caillou' is incorrect and misspelled; 'fruits' with 'some' is acceptable but unnecessary here. The repetition 'peas rather than peas' is contradictory. Use 'fruits and vegetables such as cauliflower, potatoes, tomatoes, and peas.' Use commas for list clarity and correct spelling.

× To be honest, I am not a lot of fitted in a fish market because I am your the steaming person so I'm not prefer to go such this month or feel comfortable here.

✓ To be honest, I am not comfortable in fish markets because I am a shy person, so I do not prefer to go there.

The original has multiple structure and word-choice problems: 'a lot of fitted' is ungrammatical; 'your the steaming person' is incorrect and likely intended as 'a shy person' or 'sensitive person'; 'not prefer to go such this month' is wrong tense and word order. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb-object structure, use 'comfortable in fish markets' and 'do not prefer to go there.'

× And for example there are various dishes which they subtract aroma.

✓ For example, there are various dishes that have a strong aroma.

The clause 'which they subtract aroma' is ungrammatical. Use a relative pronoun 'that' or 'which' to modify 'dishes' and a correct verb phrase like 'have a strong aroma' or 'give off aroma.' Avoid unnecessary pronoun 'they.'

× And it is often popular for a fishing because there are so many areas where fishing is allowed and they can catch fish with the help of net and they often sells fish in the market.

✓ Fishing is popular because there are many areas where it is allowed; people can catch fish with nets, and they often sell fish in the market.

Beginning with 'And' is informal; 'popular for a fishing' is incorrect—use 'Fishing is popular.' 'With the help of net' needs plural 'nets' or 'a net.' 'They often sells' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'they often sell.' Restructure sentence into clear clauses and correct verb forms.