Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然，比如“invite my friend to call my home”应改为“invite my friends to my home”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意单复数和介词的正确使用。

例: I usually invite my friends to my home and decorate my room with lots of balloons to make the atmosphere more joyful.

提案: 句子结构不清晰，语法错误较多，如“when I was a young I graduate”不合适。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

例: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my parents. My mom often baked a cake with my favorite flavor.

提案: 回答较好，表达清晰且有具体例子。建议注意“friend”应为复数“friends”，并尝试使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is very important because it allows me to spend quality time with my friends. Moreover, it helps me create wonderful memories and strengthen our relationships. For example, I usually invite my close friends to my home, and we enjoy the day together.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，如“people's parents birthday”应为“parents' birthdays”，“give them a handmade”表达不完整。建议简化句子，使用正确的所有格和表达方式。

例: I think in China, celebrating parents' birthdays is the most important because it shows our gratitude. We often give them handmade gifts to express our love.

× I usually invite my friend to call my home and decorate my room with lots of balloons which can make my room feel more joyful.

✓ I usually invite my friends to come to my home and decorate my room with lots of balloons which can make my room feel more joyful.

这里“friend”应该用复数形式“friends”，因为通常生日会邀请不止一个朋友。同时，“call my home”表达不自然，应该用“come to my home”。

× Oh, when I was a young I graduate, I celebrated my birthday with my parents and my mom often baked a cake for me with my favorite flavors.

✓ Oh, when I was young and graduated, I celebrated my birthday with my parents and my mom often baked a cake for me with my favorite flavors.

“a young”错误，应该是“young”；“graduate”应使用过去式“graduated”，因为描述过去的动作。

× Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is very important because it gives me a chance to spend quality time with my friend.

✓ Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is very important because it gives me a chance to spend quality time with my friends.

“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为通常是和多个朋友一起庆祝。

× It also helps me create wonderful memories and strengthen our relationship.

✓ It also helps me create wonderful memories and strengthen our relationships.

“relationship”应为复数“relationships”，因为与多个朋友的关系。

× Uh, I think celebrating people's parents birthday is the most important in China when because we can deliver our gratitude to my parents and give them a handmade.

✓ Uh, I think celebrating people's parents' birthdays is the most important in China because we can express our gratitude to our parents and give them handmade gifts.

“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”；“when”多余应删除；“deliver our gratitude”表达不自然，改为“express our gratitude”；“my parents”应为“our parents”；“a handmade”应为“handmade gifts”。