Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免使用不明确的词汇，并且注意单复数和冠词的使用。可以多用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: On my birthday, I usually have a special meal with my best friends and family. They prepare thoughtful gifts and cook delicious food for me. I also like to wear my nicest clothes to celebrate the day.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议使用简单句子，注意时态和词汇的准确性，避免使用不合适的词汇如“rubbish food”，可以用更合适的词汇描述。

例: When I was a child, my parents usually took me to amusement parks on my birthday. They bought me nice gifts like beautiful dresses. Sometimes, they let me eat fast food like hamburgers as a treat.

提案: 回答表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，词汇使用不当。建议用更简单明了的句子表达观点，避免使用不恰当的词汇如“strange sense of ceremony”和“makes a comedy become special”。

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important. It makes me feel valued by my friends and family, and it turns an ordinary day into a special one.

提案: 回答内容不相关且表达混乱，存在词汇错误。建议直接回答问题，明确指出在中国最重要的生日是父母的生日，并用正确的词汇表达。

例: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of parents. It is a way to show respect and gratitude to them.

× I would have an essential meal with my best friend and my families.

✓ I would have an essential meal with my best friend and my family.

families 是复数形式，但这里指的是自己的家庭，应该用单数 family。

× They would prepare expensive gifts and cook for me such as Nick, like Golden and Cosmic mistakes.

✓ They would prepare expensive gifts and cook for me, such as Nick, Golden, and Cosmic Mistakes.

such as 后面列举例子时不需要再用 like，且列举的名字之间应使用逗号分隔。

× And you know, eventually I would dress the most beautiful clothes attend the meal.

✓ And you know, eventually I would wear the most beautiful clothes to attend the meal.

dress the clothes 结构不正确，应该用 wear clothes；并且 attend 需要介词 to。

× When was a child on my birthday my parents usually team me up to amusement parks and they bought some gifts for me such as like the beautiful door and the most expensive dresses and eventually they allow me to eat rubbish food like the hamburger.

✓ When I was a child, on my birthday my parents usually took me to amusement parks and they bought some gifts for me such as the beautiful doll and the most expensive dresses, and eventually they allowed me to eat junk food like hamburgers.

缺少主语 I；team me up 用法错误，应为 took me；door 应为 doll；allow 需用过去式 allowed；rubbish food 应为 junk food；hamburger 应用复数 hamburgers。

× When was a child on my birthday my parents usually team me up to amusement parks and they bought some gifts for me such as like the beautiful door and the most expensive dresses and eventually they allow me to eat rubbish food like the hamburger.

✓ When I was a child, on my birthday my parents usually took me to amusement parks and they bought some gifts for me such as the beautiful doll and the most expensive dresses, and eventually they allowed me to eat junk food like hamburgers.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去式，如 took 和 allowed。

× Firstly, I'm a person with a strange sense of ceremony that make me feel important for my friends or my family, that which makes a comedy become special.

✓ Firstly, I'm a person with a strong sense of ceremony that makes me feel important to my friends and my family, which makes a day become special.

strange sense of ceremony 用词不当，应为 strong sense；make 主语是单数，动词应为 makes；important 后接介词 to；comedy 用词错误，应为 day。

× You know, Filipino is the most important of all in China.

✓ You know, the Filipino birthday is the most important of all in China.

Filipino 作为名词时应明确指代生日，且需要加定冠词 the。

× So I think parents birthday is most important to celebrity in China.

✓ So I think parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate in China.

parents birthday 应为 parents' birthdays（复数所有格）；most important 后应接复数动词 are；celebrity 用词错误，应为 celebrate。